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Subject: Short Fiction - The Gazebo

CrystalWizard opened this issue on May 23, 2006 · 5 posts
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CrystalWizard ( ) posted Tue, 23 May 2006 at 9:01 AM · edited Wed, 13 November 2024 at 11:01 PM

Attached Link: The Gazebo

This one's won an award. I'm posting the link to it becaus it has an illustration as well as the text. I'd appreciate some comments.

Kelly

deemarie ( ) posted Wed, 24 May 2006 at 5:18 AM

Thank you for sharing.

What a wonderful emotional experience.  I especially loved the line:

Time had demanded payment and the Gazebo had reluctantly given forth.

Excellent!

Dee-Marie

CrystalWizard ( ) posted Wed, 24 May 2006 at 6:26 AM

:) Thanks Dee :) I appreciate the compliment

Kelly

drace68 ( ) posted Thu, 25 May 2006 at 10:25 AM

Hi,

Nice piece of writing.  I especially applaud your paragraph breaks for the "Creak(s)"  White space, as advertising execs say, "Sells."  But, of course there has to be something in all that white space, and you supplied the caring words.

Dick

CrystalWizard ( ) posted Thu, 25 May 2006 at 11:12 AM

:) Thanks Dick. Compliment much appreciated. I'm really glad you liked it.

Kelly

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