I spend about two month in making a short movie for an animation contest. Of course I fail as the animation is poorly made. However, it is a good chance for me to start. Would someone give me advise and comment on the short movie so I can improve my skill. Many thanks. Click on below link to view short movie (720x576, 16Mb in size) http://www.howareyoumate.com/chrisl/

Im getting a blank page at your link

I try the link. A player (like media player) should launch in the browser and start playing the movie.

Would you try download the movie by below link
http://www.howareyoumate.com/chrisl/m01.mpg

Thanks

Attached Link: http://www.howareyoumate.com/chrisl/m01.mpg

Stunning, I think you did an execellent job, My only comments would have been to add some sound effects, walking, breathing, swords clashing...etc. sound is 50% of any film... Good luck on your next one

I agree with alamanos, sound makes or breaks a short in so many ways. Overall I thought it was pretty good for a first try, not that I have really done much in the animation line but thats just what I think :) The opening titles were a little dissapointing too, they lack some flash ... kaboom .. in your face style, but again thats just me.

I thought it was a great first try! I do have some additional comments / suggestions:

-The aesthetics were very well done - it was very pretty to look at.

-I could tell you put a lot of effort into making the motions smooth (nice!) but the movement was a little slow overall. Faster motion would have built excitement. Slow motion can add drama or increase tension. If you had combined some faster motion with the slow motion - for example she could be lightning fast when fighting the skeleton warriors but then a slow motion fireball comes from the Skull king - that would heighten the intensity of the final fight.

Of course the faster motion means you have to animate more scenes if you have a time limit.

-I really liked the camera movement showing the ring of skeletons.

I'm not a legendary director - but hopefully these are at least thought provoking.

BTW, what do the kanji characters at the end say?

Very good for a 1st try. Next time don't let the characters glide from pose to pose so much. People sometimes do that, but most of the time our movements are more abrupt. Especially when fighting demons from hell! Good work.

Thanks for all your reply. The comments are valuable to me!