Sleep sister sleep. Your travelin' days aren't done Though fiery feathers earthward fell; Like waxen wings undone. Sleep sister,sleep. The Nation weeps for you; In every heart's the memory; Of a smiling, waving crew. Sleep sister, sleep. Your mission did not end; Though now you sleep beneath the waves; You'll challenge stars again. tjames '86 The problem with this one is in the first stanza repeating the word done...I was thinking gone...done Your tavelin' days aren't gone; Though fiery feathers earthward fell; Like waxen wings undone...better?

I don't think it's too bad, myself. I guess because "undone" has two sylables. Like, ended and suspended. I worked to see if I (perish the thought) could come up with anything better that kept the meaning and all I came up with is this: Your travelin' days aren't through Though fiery feathers earthward fell; Like waxen wings unglued. Even that doesn't seem as good to me. Besides the "near" rhyming of the two words in question, there is the "follow-through" problem with using "through" and the next line starting with "though". So, I think the "done twins" are the better choice. PS, pardon me for being dumb, but all I can't think about is Sally Ride. Does it have anything to do with that?

Jeez! Please send a digital slap and while you're at it, replace "can't" with "can".

Forget about it...Send a message to to crescent about setting up a poetry workshop. She can schedule the chat time and all of us can get to the room and rip up the lines. Not bad cc through...unglued I think M would object he has a nice picture of icarus falling with his feathers trailing behind and the image of waning and waxing space flight. No, I don't think glue quite fits, but it sounds ok.

Yeah, I figured....but I tried...hehe. I know about Icarus...but because of the date, I thought it had something to do with Sally. Not the first time I've been wrong.

That's another.The poem is about the Challenger exploding the reference to firebird is a Phoenix crashing to earth in flames to be reborn from the fires of its own destruction, and the getting to close to the sun and the waxen feathers, well I've already explained that. The hubricient (overpuffed with pride) attitude of the US towards its space program was like Icarus so taken with his ability to fly he flew too close to the sun. The US felt any risk minimal and pushed the envelope to launch..the results were the same. Icarus and the Challenger both fell.

So, I WAS right! However !!! I didn't catch the other meanings you had in mind. And, I agree with you! I come from Atlanta...got burned to the ground during the Civil War. The Phoenix is a symbolic statue that sits inside the city center. Good work.

Bonus Nachos the night shift is o'er and I am did out hooey.

You are also a TRIP, TJ!

Hey, if you guys want to schedule a poetry workshop in the chat room, go for it! The chat room is open 24/7. I won't lock the doors, honest! ;-) I have really bad carpal tunnel, so I can't participate in chats, personally, but y'all are more than welcome to use the chat room here whenever you want. If you want it too look official, I can post a message about it, but you're certainly welcome to do it as well. I'd be glad to post a reminder in the announcement box up top if you find a time/day that works. I'm just a helper here. The forum belongs to you guys (and gals.) Do what you want so long as it's legal and constructive. Cheers!

Well, POOP! It sounded good till that "legal" part.