My ideas Obviously Poser 5. Or Gift Vouchers for using in Renderosity? Free subscription to Renderosity Magazine? Being printed in Renderosity Magazine? Piece of work displayed at top of forum in new Victory Corner?!! Grudging mention by moderator that someone did the best work? See how my ambitions plummet as reality sets in. Whatever it is, this time, I vote that Chuck gets it. :-) Unless it's poser 5 then I think I deserve it. lol

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ermm, I meant a reason within the piece itself, but thanks for the info :-) Be happy.

Crisjon, I would welcome your constructive suggestions on any of my work. Indigo Splash same goes for you. I would love to see some of your work here in the forum. I am a novice and I think this is a nice place to be. Let's keep it that way. Please. :-) Now back to grammar etc... "If he thinks I'm going to do that, he's got another thing coming." Isn't it supposed to be "another think coming"? ARGHHH.

I just read this whole thread again, and although I KNOW I ought to say Crescents work is the best, my favourite piece of writing here is Chucks description of himself reading Crescents work. I think you spoke for us all lol:-)

Hi Caledonia, Thank you for deciding to post this. I look forward to seeing more of your work in the future. I am just a hobbyist myself, so this is just my personal opinion but here goes. I like your poem, it creates some beautiful mental images and for some reason made me think of Wuthering Heights, but it left me with a couple of questions. 1. LIGHTENING (in title) Is the poem meant to be titled this way? LIGHTNING = weather stuff LIGHTENING = lifting the burden (or bleaching) As far as I can tell, it could go either way (not the bleaching way) There are a couple of spelling errors, which I assume you know about. 2. What is up with the character? This poem seems to work it's way through a time of emotional turmoil and reach a calmer place on the other side, but what is the turmoil? I can't find the why for this piece. Maybe it's a matter of personal taste, but I feel a need to see the reason for a piece, either in the title or the body of the work itself. Maybe I'm just terminally nosey. Overall though, I like it a lot. ps. Do you illustrate your work? This seems to be begging to be done in Vue:-)

I got lo res Victoria 1 free from Daz.....she works just fine in Poser 3 (didn't know she wasn't supposed to!) Thanks all for some good ideas. :-) It's taken me since January to save for p4, going to have to wait until next year for p5. It's not cos I don't want to........:-) Shanna

Well, I want to read it already. I would say, as a reader, that if you want to keep me with him throughout a long story, then he needs some kind of redeeming characteristic, or a very good adversary (which I have to assume the goddess-queen is.) Perhaps someone could be more wicked than he is? Then I would be glad when he outwits them. Wishing you luck. Now waiting for chapter one....... Where is it? Shanna, the very definition of patience:-)

I have never seen a copy of Poser 4 for sale in Britain. Please direct me to the appropriate bargain bin because I'm still on Poser 3!

If the exercises are going to continue, it would be nice to have some guidelines on those (and an intro to explain what they are) eg Can you make multiple submissions? Are we supposed to comment on each others submissions or leave it up to the moderator? Can you post them late? If so, do you post them in a new thread or in the old one? etc...etc... I like exercise :-)

and am I the only person who hears "voice over man" from the movies reading out book blurbs in my head? lol

We were going to discuss the book blurbs posted after the nineteenth so here's my opinion. Ramnimus, I liked your book blurb although it seemed to me to be aimed more at a young adult audience than the general adult audience. Something in the way your sentences were put together. Perhaps it is because they are quite simple with no big words or concepts expressed. (I have a fourteen year old son who reviews books for young teens so I see a lot of them!) ps First to post....brave, very brave :-) Mine on the other hand was awful. Reading it now a few days later, it seems false and I have a horrible feeling that every sentence I have written is from the back of someone elses book. I hang my head in shame and deserve to. Gosh it's hard to do book blurbs!

I'd like to see your work :-) People don't seem so quick to ignite in here. It's a nice forum.

I went to your sheep65 site and get the impression you were educated to university standard. I want to learn to write in a way that doesn't make people grind their teeth so please explain in words a girl who never stayed on for A levels can understand. The reasons behind your comment went straight over my head. How can I make it better? What did I do wrong? Perhaps you would consider rewriting this (or anyone else who feels like it) piece? So I could see where you think I've gone wrong. Hurt me. As long as you help me.

Surprises instead of surprizes is not a grammar thing, it's a spelling thing. That is how the word is correctly spelt here in the uk. Our reference book for the correct spelling of a word is the Oxford English Dictionary. Most people have a small version somewhere in their home as the full edition, updated annually, runs to dozens of A4 sized volumes. I find grammar difficult myself. Writing often seems to use colloquial expressions which break every rule in the book.