Fri, Jan 10, 1:32 AM CST

Renderosity Forums / Poser - OFFICIAL



Welcome to the Poser - OFFICIAL Forum

Forum Coordinators: RedPhantom

Poser - OFFICIAL F.A.Q (Last Updated: 2025 Jan 09 3:46 am)



Subject: WIP: Critique Needed


darthuv ( ) posted Thu, 15 June 2006 at 11:32 AM · edited Thu, 25 July 2024 at 8:28 PM

file_345401.jpg

One of the hardess things for an artist is to stop fussing and say your done. I think I might be there, but I'm not sure. Please look over my composition and let me know if you see or feel anything is missing. If you do, please be as detailed as possible in let me know what it is. Thank you for your time and help, darthuv


UrbanChilli ( ) posted Thu, 15 June 2006 at 11:54 AM

This is to be an artistic picture right? No one but you can tell if something is missing :)


darthuv ( ) posted Thu, 15 June 2006 at 12:40 PM

Yes, I know I didn't give background to the meaning of the image, so no one can tell if somethings missing there. But I was asking as far as color theory, composition, and other areas of art craftsmenship; Does anything seem missing or out of place?


Miss Nancy ( ) posted Thu, 15 June 2006 at 2:07 PM

it's an evocative image, reminiscent of german expressionist style (ca. 1930). the large head is the focus, and it's effective in that way. however, the entire scene is too symmetrical IMVHO, the background is weak, and the figure in the chair is too small and dark to see well.



BAR-CODE ( ) posted Thu, 15 June 2006 at 2:10 PM

mmm i think its like this when the maker start asking if he is missing a thing etc etc..

Your done!

the image was in YOUR mind so when you cant see anymore to do it finished

And with this kind of images its realy impossible to AD something to the image that was in your mind....

So dont be afraid nobody can see this image and say hey thats missing...

A girl with No head ... mmm yeah then we can say how about  a head for the girl  ... get my idea...

Chris

 

IF YOU WANT TO CONTACT BAR-CODE SENT A  PM to 26FAHRENHEIT  "same person"

Chris

 


My Free Stuff



darthuv ( ) posted Thu, 15 June 2006 at 2:49 PM

Ok, got it.
Thanks for all the help.
I'm going to make one minor correction, then post it.


diolma ( ) posted Thu, 15 June 2006 at 5:15 PM

OK - a critique....(Not that I'm any sort of expert!)

When I 1st looked at this pic, my eye flew to the big b/w head. It then travelled down the hair(?) on one side of the picture and out into limbo.
Back again, through the head, and out and down the hair(?) to the other side, and again out of the picture...
Back again. Look at Big Head. Notice "blank eyes"

Break.

When I had recovered from that, I looked again. Found the figure below. Followed the gaze of the smaller figure - to end up exiting through the bottom of the picture.

For me, (and of course, I speak only for myself), the composition doesn't work. It's too fragmented, and has conflicting points of interest.

My suggestions (offered, I hope, in the spirit of improvement - not that I could have done better):

  1. Reduce the impact of the top (B/W) figure by fading it down a lot more (so it's more shadowy).
  2. Change the hair(?) such that it doesn't lead stratight out of the composition, but leads the eye to the figure below.

(Possible 3. Tilt the face of the BW figure so that it's looking down towards the 2nd figure.)

There needs to be a context here. Is the 2nd figure conjuring the BW figure? Dominating it? Being dominated by it? The relationship between the two (and the viewer) isn't at all clear.

The picture is well constructed and well executed in technical terms, but any impact is negated by lack of any meaning...

At least, that's MHO...

Hope that helps:-))

Cheers,
Diolma

(OTOH - If you like it as it is, then, as said above - it's done..)



Privacy Notice

This site uses cookies to deliver the best experience. Our own cookies make user accounts and other features possible. Third-party cookies are used to display relevant ads and to analyze how Renderosity is used. By using our site, you acknowledge that you have read and understood our Terms of Service, including our Cookie Policy and our Privacy Policy.