Attached Link: Emberglow: Touching Galley Proof -Pt1

Dear Friends; I'm reformating the past installments of my Graphic novel.  This is not an easy project, and entails a lot of hard work.  Posted here is the 1st Part of the touching installment.  You'll notice that the touching is now 12 scenes, divided into 6 and 6, rather than the previous nine.  I found that I needed to add more visual action sets to my textual  content, so as to balance the juxtapose between the visual and text better.   Please look this over, tear it apart, and tell me what needs changing and what you like.  I'm not entirely happy with it, but I'm too fagged at this moment to think straight to tell what's good and what's dross. I'll very much appreciate any & all aid & suggestions that you can grant me! Yours truly, David P. Hoadley

 I would give the images more space.  Remove the flower clipart from every frame, pull the text down to where the clipart is and resize the images so they fill out the width of the frame (you might need to crop them).   I think think you'd have a cleaner composition that way.  Also turn down the transparency of the background a little bit.   Anyway, that's my 2 kronas.  Good luck with the reformatting.