Im getting goose pimples reading your poetry as usual.. This is another great one ..Im hoping that it is just a poem, that your not feeling as bad as that.. And certainly do not give up ever.. as usual ..Im full of admiration for your writing great reading. I was going to leave rendo last week, (it,s a long story)..Someone very nice wrote to me and I change my mind always write to a friend in time of trouble.. All the best dear lady. looking forward to more of your great poems

Oh, you're going to hate me. The language is clear and the experience is vivid. I believe the body is too long and you can cut at least half of the statements, giving room to more deserving lines. The "...once ...trust" is akward where "...seems ...dreams" is simple and brilliant. You would have a shorter poem with only the best lines.

If you give up, you'll become a mundane... might as well be a robot! On English teacher would say, "whom do I trust," but Scully would say, "Trust No One!" :D As for starting, it doesn't matter where: Just do. "There is no Try: Only Do!"--Yoda == As for trimming, some poems are like a firecracker: Pop! It's over, deep impact. Others are like a rainstorm: Drizzle drizzle constant soaking; long lasting effect, just as deep, and long enough to be absorbed and rememebered. Let it be your style, your poem, unless you have a target publication that you're willing to adapt to.

As usual you speak your words well.

loves it!!! your a great writer and i love reading your poetry,keep up the good work!