Distant Moon Can See by hipps13

Writers • (none) • posted on Jul 21, 2007

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So Afraid It Seems Distant eyes tales a story See through eyes can tell So afraid it seems Alone in the darkness Spirit night does see Showed me how Never knew the love A world inside my eyes Could learned to see Found a way Almost anyway The tears seem to be Life how it is to seem So much you feeling So much it helps Mr. Moon Midnight sun Stars above Guide my way Tickle me pink Kiss me sweet Hold me close Hug me tight Under the tree Watch the water Does its thing Peaceful dreams Before the storm Calmness strikes Feels the air Hush my child A new day begins Will be there ©LKS 2007 *Image Bryce 5.5 I was just playing around so please be nice :-) Sweet smile weekend to ya

Comments (10)

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Skyback

7:15PM | Sat, 21 July 2007

Impressing work! 5+!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Richardphotos

8:14PM | Sat, 21 July 2007

dramatic writing with a keen insight into your psyche.

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auntietk

9:01PM | Sat, 21 July 2007

I like the change in the feel of your poem between the first and second parts. The words you've chosen, and the meter you used, creates a tentative, halting first section. The second section seems to slide effortlessly to a new day, a beginning and conclusion all at once. Really nice work!

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