In my Bed - Challenge Arena entry..... by SusiQ
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Sorry, but my words would not let me go... I had to do another entry but this will be the last one - I promise.. (I must get back to my novel...)
Hugs all and have a great day.
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In my bed
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How do I compete
With those stunning works of art
When the words in my head
just won't even start.
How can I describe
A sunrise so gold
Just who am I
to be oh so bold?
But the love of the language
was given to me
I just could not stop
And let it be.
So here it goes
To the Dawn of the day....
I'll word you just right
See what I have to say...
A pale filtered glow
Starts to break the night
as nocturnal critters
hide away from sight
The soft twitter calls
from across the air
Signs of the day
to show they are there.
A whispered rustle
shows the path of the deer
and leads to the watering
hole that is near.
The dream filled head
lifts up gently to see
if the clock on the mantle
is calling to me
But early it is
with the dawn just arrived
So I snuggle back down
With a sigh deep inside.
My words can sleep
till at least eight o'clock
So back at the dream door
I wait with a knock...
Comments (7)
SusiQ
Hiya all! Come and join us in the Challenge arena! The April/May challenge is for all mediums of art and ends on May 27th!! Join us and have some FUN!!! http://www.renderosity.com/mod/forumpro/showthread.php?thread_id=2736998 Hugs all!
Chipka
**Okay, go write your novel, but the next time something like this wants to come out, just go on and let it out! This is a good piece of writing, evocative of very strong emotion that is quite appealing...there is a great sensual quality to this...sight, sound, physical sensation. Great work.
SusiQ
LoL Chipka... I'm sure you know all about the characters wanting to climb out of your mind to explore the world.. Thanks and big hug!
meico
I thoroughly enjoyed the gentle lyrical flow of the body of this poem and the whimsical introductory stanzas set the scene beautifully. I'm sure you'll do well! Thanks for the invitation, but I'm allergic to contests of any sort! Mike
SusiQ
The best way to rid one's self of an allergy is to slowly make yourself immune to it by consuming tiny portions of the poison until your body/mind accepts it... LoL Hugs and thanks for the support.
leanndra
Susi, This is another wonderful piece of prose. There is such a feeling of peacefulness and serenity here. Thanks for writing it, and again, Good Luck! Lea
LovelyPoetess
Ohhhhh I just loved your ending, the image of knocking at the "dream door" set my imagination to the one labeled "day" : ) Bravo! Well written work.