Dawn of the day.... Challenge Arena Entry by SusiQ
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Description
Listen!
Hear that early morning
Creeping in under your heavy curtain.
Breathe in deep and awaken
to the soft expectant twittering
Of the first visitors of the day.
The quick whisper of kids
Sneaking something they shouldn't
from the fridge.
The playful growls and yaps
of mom and puppies
testing their energies.
NO!
Don't open your eyes yet.
Just wait,
Enjoy....
A slow stretch from nail to nail.
The soft rub of cotton sheets
on sleep-warmed skin.
The jingle of the cat on the prowl
for company - and food.
A deep sigh of happiness
is a very fullfilling way
to greet the dawn of the day.
Comments (13)
meico
The soft leisurely pace of the poem is entirely appropriate for the subject. I enjoyed it all but my favourite bit is: The quick whisper of kids Sneaking something they shouldn't from the fridge. Ah such memories! Mike
SusiQ
LoL!!! Those are the best kind of memories although at the time the results can be quite irritating (especially when you are saving that last piece of chocolate to counteract the PMS phase!!!! LoL)
busi2ness
The familiar thoughts in the poem sound both comforting and alarming as the day brings new things. I would love to know how the entry did in the challenge.
SusiQ
Will let you know Sir Piet! Hey why don't you all join me there - it is a challenge for all types of art! Photography, writing, 3d, poser, terragen etc!!! Come on people, just go to the Challenge arena under the contests link at the top of the page!!! Come beat me into submission... lol
SusiQ
Whoops - my bad.... Not under the contests link but under the forums link http://www.renderosity.com/mod/forumpro/showforum.php?forum_id=12372 Hugs!
daffodilbaggins
A lovely poem, wonderfully descriptive--well done!
leanndra
Susi, and wonderful descriptive poem of serenity! Good luck on the challenge! I think I will check out the link too! Lea
dhanco
What beautiful and real words, Susi. Brilliant work!
ShadowsNTime
Beautifully written and said! Lots of memories were envisioned, thank you!
Chipka
Wonderfully evocative! Everything in this is so concrete and yet the impression it gives is distinctly ethereal in many ways.
zoren
beautiful way to start the day!! very nice!!
SusiQ
Thank you all. You have all made my week so much better! Hugs to you all and don't forget to enter yourselves in whatever medium you are artistic in!
auntietk
Beautifully done! I like this one a lot.