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The Fog...The Final Chapter

Writers Horror posted on Oct 12, 2008
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October 31, 2009....(OneYearLater) Mindy had been walking along the road for what seemed for hours. The gastly fog becoming a night-marish ordeal. Her brother had to work over time at the local dance club and couldn't take her to Julie's Halloween party, so she had begun walking. It was against her better judgement to walk after hearing the story a year ago about a young girl's disappearance on Browns Run Road, her body never found. It was the same road which Mindy now walked. Mindy had been afraid of the fog ever since that incident but she wanted so badly to attend the party that she set her fears aside, just for this one night. Browns Run Road was located in the country and was a very winding road, huge trees lining both sides of it. There were no street lights at all and most of the farm houses sat way back off the road. There were a few private roads that ran off of it, most hills that made it impossible to get up or down in icy or snowy weather. The only business that was located on Browns Run was a country club. And then there was the old cemetary never used now, the weather ridden headstones now broken and chipped. The only life to step inside it was teenagers who would park inside to make out. Most everyone knew everyone else on the road so when Cassie Logan disappeared it was the talk of the small community. Mindy didn't know her personally as Cassie's family was rather new to the town. Mindy was a year older than Cassie but she had seen her around school. Mindy often wondered what ever happened to Cassie. Her thoughts were interrupted by the high screech of what sounded like a dog. It sent a piercing chill through Mindy's blood. It frightned her so badly she stopped dead in her tracks. She could see nothing because of the fog but she twirled around in a panic looking behind her and to each side. There was nothing that she could see but she wasn't about to go any further. She turned around, heading back home. No party was this important. The dog could have rabies and attack her. With no hesitation at all, Mindy turned around. She picked up her pace to almost a run, hoping to put some distance between her and the hideous sound of the dog. Sometime later Mindy saw the large spot light that sat back against her home, which sat between two cornfields way back from the road. The drive was gravel and she hurried up it, relief sweeping over her that she had made it home. The walk home had seemed shorter somehow but regardless, she was home. She darted right to go across the walking bridge that sat over the creek which run through the land of her home. But upon arriving at the other side of the bridge she sensed something was terribly wrong. The layout of the land was as it should be, the bridge as it had always been, the fields on both sides of the driveway, the silo straight ahead in the middle of the drive, the barn just beyond it.... but the house, the house was not her home. She stared at it in disbelief, how could this be so? It was a tall, gruesome looking house with peeling paint. It seemed to breathe in the fog. It seemed to speak to her causing the hair on her arms to stand on end. There was a candle flickering a yellowish glow in one of the windows, beckoning her to come in to the warmth of the home and out of the fog. It seemed to hypnotize her. She moved closer to the house, stepped up on to the porch, the rotting steps creaking under each step.... The door opened slowly, the terrifying screams of the dog hovered in the night air. Her heart pounded as she stepped inside, the door slamming shut behind her. The house reaked of decay and a sense of dread filled the pits of her belly. Just ahead in the darkness she saw eyes staring back at her. The eyes of an animal, lurking, ready to jump out at her. She screamed as the heavy winds began to howl outside but no one heard as the beast in the darkness moved toward her, half woman, half dog. It threw its head back howling a sound of torment and anquish just before it lunged at her, tearing her flesh from her bones, feasting upon what used to be the girl named Mindy. October 15, 2018 Brown's Run Cronicle Fears were growing today that the mystery over the disappearance of Mindy Sever and Cassie Logan, among many others who have disappeared since 2008, will never be solved unless dramatic new evidence is found. Witnesses have described hearing the fearful howling of dogs near the rustic gates of the cemetary and of hearing young girls sobbing inside. Other witnesses claim to see the ghosts of young girls hovering over some of the graves. Others ramble on about the strange yellow light that seems to flicker inside the confinements of the century old cemetary. Police tell us they need concrete evidence of the disappearance of these girls, not made up horror chapters of people reading horror books. The city has however cancelled Halloween until said cases are solved. The police will arrest anyone found on Browns Run Road for any reason the night of Halloween in the future. Angry parents fear their child could be next and have voiced their concerns that the police will not investigate the sightings at the graveyard. The parents of the girls who are missing have pleaded with police to no avail to bring in a medium to explain the sightings of the old cememtary and to learn why one girl each Halloween night disappears and why each year a dense fog has appeared. With just a little over two weeks to this Halloween, time will tell. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~THE END~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Comments (11)


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ontar1

10:42AM | Sun, 12 October 2008

Fantastic conclusion, excellent work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Anain

11:09AM | Sun, 12 October 2008

Amazing story and even more impressive final. Fantastic!

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Fidelity2

11:31AM | Sun, 12 October 2008

Very well done. 5+!

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Jay-el-Jay

11:45AM | Sun, 12 October 2008

They can't stop this horror by trying to cancel Halloween.Is this really the end...or is it just the beginning?Nyah,Ha,Ha!

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mikeerson

3:05PM | Sun, 12 October 2008

The ending is strange... You jump ahead to 2018 and nothing has been solved - You've been watching twilight zones haven't you? lol ...I did notice your creature in this one was a girl, so cassie must of turned into the creature... but what about the man creature? will time tell?

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myquad

5:10PM | Sun, 12 October 2008

Fantastic ending and maybe more to come? Great story, Marlene!

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photostar

7:31PM | Sun, 12 October 2008

Ahhh....werewolves, but they only come out during a full moon....hmmmm. There's got to be a sequel, Marly. This story has to continue, perhaps by another character individual telling more of it a few years later.

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Chipka

10:01PM | Sun, 12 October 2008

Oooh, Now THIS is good. Really good. And on top of that, it's good. You've put an interesting ending to this, which opens possibilities for a "frame story" bookmarked by an opening and closing that are from an outside perspective to the protagonist characters. I'm intrigued by that possibility, but I have to say that there's nothing here that needs to be changed. If anything, there's material here that can be expanded and played around with...and that's always a good thing. I love the fact that this story is engaging, compelling, and hard to ignore, but I also have to admit that I love the hints of openings that it presents as well. Great stuff. I like your style and your sense of pace. The funny thing is, what works best in this story is the fact that the pacing has more of the feel of a romance novel, or...yeah...work of horror...but the type of buildup is emotional in the way that romance works are often built up. THIS is an interesting twist within the horror genre, and hopefully we get to see a lot more of your writing ability. You've got quite a LOT of it!

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nosetackle

10:25PM | Sun, 12 October 2008

Wow!!! Far out story!!! Thinkin' maybe Stephen King is your own personal muse!!! Your talent is obvious,writing appears to be one of your many fortes. I loved "The Fog" Marlene...you are quite a lady!!! Dennis

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davidoblad

5:57PM | Mon, 13 October 2008

Great conclusion Marcy. Neat way to end it with more questions than answers. I assume what attacked Mindy was a former version of Cassie? How long has this been going on? What started it all and how many young folks been suckered in all total? I aggree with Chipka.. a bit of fleshing out and some proof reading.. you would have a first class horror story. Still, a very good read as is. Bravo and hugs from Dave :^)

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vaggabondd

8:29AM | Tue, 14 October 2008

Not mindy too. lol. this really is very good writing my friend :)


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