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The Fog.........Part 3

Writers Horror posted on Oct 11, 2008
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For a moment Cassie just stood there, her eyes carefully scanning her surroundings. Her legs shook in fear threatning to fold underneath her. She noticed the light in the window on the far side of the room. The windows were huge, from ceiling to floor taking up a whole wall with wide window sills, with a built in bench under them for sitting, also going the full length of the wall. The curtains were long but dusty and smelled of mildew and all were pulled open. She made her way across the room on shakey legs. The floors creaked underneath her. She reached for the candle, knocking cob webs out from around it. Grasping the candle holder, she extended her arm outward moving the candle around the room to see what was here. There was furniture, but it was covered with dingy sheets that had seen better days. Built in book shelves lined 3 walls, all were full of books, the covers all green from the mold that now incased them. It was then that the dog began its gruesome howling again, sending chills up her spine. It was time to leave this place and try to find her way back home. She ran back the way she had come from, to the kitchen area but stopped dead in her tracks upon reaching it. She could now see it and what her eyes looked upon was something so horrifying she vomited. The slime she had felt earlier along the counter top was blood and what appeared to be guts. She looked at her hands, they were red from where she had ran her hand through it. It was too much for a fifteen year old girl to absorb. She screamed over and over again but her legs wouldn't move. Her screams filled the air with the heart wrenching cries of the dog. A tree branch screeched across the window, paralizing her even more. Her eyes widened in agonizing fear as she looked toward the window. Standing in it, peering inside, was a man and he was looking at her. But he was no ordinary looking man. He was so grotesque, hideous beyound her wildest imagination. He looked upon her with dead eyes, his face horribly deformed, part human and part dog. He flashed an evil grin at her displaying yellow canine teeth...he threw his head back and he howled as he made his way to the door. Cassie screamed and this time her legs obliged and she ran, ran for her life through the eerie house. A house that now held her captive. She had no idea where she was running to, just anywhere her legs would carry her, away from the grisly form she knew was probably chasing her. It's bloodcurdling screams shook the old house, the smell of decay surrounding her. It was then she felt a hand grab her ankle, causing her to lose her footing and she crumbled to the floor, sending the candle flying across the room. She smelled smoke as the fire danced across the curtains. She felt the ripping of her flesh as long, sharp claws dug into her. Her screams of mercy went unnoticed as she tried to escape the clutches of the disfigured man. Her arms waved aimlessly through the air, her own nails digging at his appalling face. But it was to no avail, she was to be his and now belonged to this house forever. When the blackness came, it was a welcomed relief. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~TO BE CONTINUED~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Comments (13)


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1010

9:17AM | Sat, 11 October 2008

Awesdome scary story. You should write a novel.

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Fidelity2

10:36AM | Sat, 11 October 2008

Very very good. 5+!!!

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myquad

10:46AM | Sat, 11 October 2008

You're a great writer, Marlene! Well done. Can't wait for more!

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ontar1

11:10AM | Sat, 11 October 2008

Wow, fantastic, excellent work!!!!!!!!!!

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mikeerson

1:34PM | Sat, 11 October 2008

as I was reading, I'm reading the 3 uploads back to back, she came to this house because she saw the light... I don't think you ever brought up what that light was. When she found the candle, I didn't catch if it was lit. The story is really good and is keeping me entertained, I just thought I'd throw some proof reading at ya.... and Lastly, she dropped the candle and It sounds like the curtains are catching fire - you end this to be continued with it getting dark - with the fire, my imagination was feeling it getting brighter, so you might want to tell the viewers she's passing out to get to the darkness. I like your story and If you looked at your writings as a frame for a sculpture and went back through and created pictures, this would be something you might want to think about marketing.

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Hendesse

2:19PM | Sat, 11 October 2008

Fantastic story indeed. When will you publish your first book? :)

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nosetackle

6:53PM | Sat, 11 October 2008

Am reading your latest as I eat a very late breakfast. I enjoy cereal with my serials...heh heh But seriously folks! You tell a mean story Marlene! Glad to watch it unravel bit by bit...it's great!!! Dennis

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ledwolorz

2:40AM | Sun, 12 October 2008

Fantastic story.

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Anain

4:18AM | Sun, 12 October 2008

An excellent story, now wait a quarter of this interesting history of terror. I look forward to continue reading! :)

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Jay-el-Jay

11:01AM | Sun, 12 October 2008

An intense nightmare story.

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Chipka

9:55PM | Sun, 12 October 2008

This is a wonderful work, riveting, and definitely something to hold my attention. It's been said before, but you're a good writer, and I see glimmers of all sorts of things to come. Great read here! I was riveted.

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davidoblad

5:44PM | Mon, 13 October 2008

Great story Marcy. I'm Riveted. Also much easier to read since you've broken the spacing.. thanks for that. I didn't catch it was a light that drew her to the house to start with.. will have to go back and check that. I did understand or assume the blackness was her passing out. Glad to see the rest of the story was posted over the weekend, so I won't have to wait to read the ending. Bravo and hugs from Dave :^)

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vaggabondd

8:20AM | Tue, 14 October 2008

This is very good writing my friend, very good


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