One Of Those Days by beachzz
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Did you ever have a day when everything just seemed off, out of kilter, just not quite right? I did.
One Of Those Days
Boy was today
A strange one
An earthquake
Woke me up
I was late for
An appointment
I heard words
That confused
Confounded
Compounded
Completely
Mixed me up
It was cold
And foggy
And so was
My brain
I felt like
I didn't know if
I were coming
Or going
Left from right
Up from down
Inside from
Outside
I walked
And that
Helped some
But then
It got
Weird again
So I think
I'm just gonna
Forget about
Today
And wait to see what tomorrow brings
10/28/08
Comments (11)
auntietk
Great job capturing the feel of your day - wow. This is excellent!
PD154
Agree with Auntie T, it does illustrate how you feel at the time.
Janiss
Marvelous words and capture Marilyn!
Thelby
When I feel like that I want to go back to bed 8^P
photostar
Oh yes, quite a few of 'em in fact...LOL
Kaartijer
Pretty nice!*****
gypsyflame
A beautiful writing and I think we've all had days like this where crawling back in to bed seems the wisest thing to do.
frankie96
Hang in there....
Chipka
Ooooh! First off, the image that accompanies this is astonishing! It's most definitely a FINE example of cover art, if ever I saw one! Now, onto what you wrote...first off, you started with an intensely compelling hook. Earthquakes aren't common in any part of the world I've lived in or visited, and so the almost casual statement that an Earthquake woke you up is something that immediately establishes a bead of tension that you maintain through the entire piece. GREAT WORK! And the fact that you were able to distill all of that and present it just shows that 1) you've got resilience, and 2) things get better!
tallpindo
The oxbow is on foot.
anahata.c
well, hard to follow-up on Chip, but I'll try. (You get fine comments, people catch your work well...) I like the little 'breaths' in your poem, short little lines, sometimes one word (confounded/compounded/completely), and I like the feeling you express too—wrote a whole journey by end. And I agree, we don't get earthquakes either: Man, if I was awaken by an earthquake, I'd be outa town in a New York Minute! (I'm in Chicago, we didn't get a "Minute": I bow to NY, the little snots...) But where you are, I guess they're common enough...Nice job, Marilyn, you do minimal very well; and I love the visual—a kind of other-world glowing shot of a desert (I think!) Gotta tell ya, that'd stun me as much as an earthquake. Will be reading more of your writing in the coming days. I'veI enjoyed your photography so much, I haven't stopped by your writing enough. Mea culpa...