Haikus Of Life by beachzz
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Haikus Of Life
All of a sudden
Something shifted changed quickly
And I felt lighter
I've been carrying
This load of feelings and moods
For far too much time
Now I've taken steps
To shift that load and lose it
To walk more freely
It's a long hard road
Full of bumps and obstacles
I'll go around them
The end of that road
Holds peace happiness and love
It's just that simple
One step at a time
Little tiny baby steps
And a few backwards
Oh, I just can't wait
I'm so ready for this change
It's all there waiting
11/17/08
Comments (15)
BlackWidow77
Those are exceptional. So well written and expressive. Good job, not to many people do the haikus. :)
tallpindo
Like the last breath of a pearl diver, don't release it until you are back at the surface. What is in your hand at that point is the treasure.
PD154
Excellence sweetie, you write so nicely.
auntietk
What a fabulous idea, to use the haiku form to write a longer poem! Brilliant work. Well done!
JeffG7BRJ
I hope everything turns out as good as it sounds, seems to be a big step that your taking, but cut down to baby ones. Exceptional writen word Marylin, makes for interesting reading. Bravo!!!!!
hipps13
wonderful work warm hug, Linda
timtripp
wonderful!
Janiss
Gorgeous!
photostar
A powerful message of inner feelings all composed within 7 sets of 3 lines each.
smillinfaces
beautiful the words you have writen
jocko500
lovely
goodoleboy
What, pray tell, is Haiku? Some kind of catharsis? Your insightful prose reminds me to do something about my physical balance. I may have to enroll in a exercise class to remedy my klutzness.
Chipka
WOW! I've actually written longer poems in which each stanza was a stand alone haiku! It's NOT an easy thing to do, and you've done so beautifully. The whole point of Haiku is to convey a particular emotion as well as a pronounced visual image and you've done that completely. And I love the line about "little tiny baby steps/and a few backwards." That's so much of what life IS, and it's profoundly touching. There's some raw honesty in here and I love it.
brother_meed
Haiku is plural Winter nights bring out holy socks As I stoke the fire _____ Yes, write! b.
anahata.c
haikus? not easy Always a challenge (for me) I don't do them much. But a string—seven? Just like the linked-verse of old! Basho, meet your match... Cold winds, Chicago. I search for hope in the night: Here, now—I found it. (thoughtful feelings too... no, no more words, just thanks: Your sensitive haiku...)