Fading Away by beachzz

Writers • Atmosphere/Mood • posted on Mar 19, 2009

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Fading Away There’s this sense Of a wisp In the wind I can’t touch it Hear it Feel it It’s just Beyond my Reach My dreams Can find The body The soul I can Wrap my arms Around it Feel it Know it Take in its Very essence But I can’t Spend my life Dreaming I wake up And get on With the day 3/19/09

Comments (15)

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Lisajobb

11:53AM | Thu, 19 March 2009

This is a beautiful poem and gorgeous image. It really touched me.

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durleybeachbum

12:37PM | Thu, 19 March 2009

Excellent!

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Celtic_Lass

1:00PM | Thu, 19 March 2009

Beautiful...

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lizzibell

1:13PM | Thu, 19 March 2009

Beautiful...

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bmac62

2:54PM | Thu, 19 March 2009

You did it! Photo first...words second. Bet your words came quick and almost easily. That's the way your poem reads...just like you are reporting on something that just really happened. Reading this is experiencing it. Outstanding.

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hipps13

4:02PM | Thu, 19 March 2009

wonderful work warm hug, Linda

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sandra46

4:57PM | Thu, 19 March 2009

great image, moving poem. Thank you!!!!

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goodoleboy

7:02PM | Thu, 19 March 2009

Old soldiers never die, they just fade away... (General Douglas MacArthur) Love the haunting image of the moon, Maz. And more cathartic prose from your active mind.

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jocko500

7:16PM | Thu, 19 March 2009

cool

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auntietk

8:11PM | Thu, 19 March 2009

Wonderful mood ... beautifully done!

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magnus073

10:04PM | Thu, 19 March 2009

Super image and I love the theme behind it

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junge1

10:35PM | Thu, 19 March 2009

Excellent Marilyn!

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anahata.c

4:41PM | Fri, 20 March 2009

so Bill said that you started with the photo...so you let the photo inspire the poem? If so, kudos. It's very hard for many writers, I barely can do it myself. It's really sensitively done. And your poem, in all its concision, has real formal music, the way you made the two main stanzas, the 'hear it/feel it' and 'feel it/know it' in the second, very nicely done. You know, these little moments, these little alightings, they come & go but are permanent inside us. Maybe the soul was giving you a pre-waking gift, and you took it with you the rest of your day. So you leave it behind, but it doesn't leave you. Beautiful little gemstone. And nice angelic vision of the dark in your photo...

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