Heart Healing by beachzz

Writers • Realism • posted on Mar 24, 2009

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Heart Healing Breathe in Breathe out Take a deep breath Let it go Gut punched Never saw it coming Feels like The weight Of the world On my soul Stand straight Inhale deeply Let it out Rid the soul Of the toxins Breathe in Breathe out Take a deep breath Let it go Relax Float Sigh Take in All the good Air Let the bad Air Out Breathe in Breathe out Take a deep breath Let it go 3/22/09

Comments (14)

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bmac62

1:56AM | Tue, 24 March 2009

Beautifully short and to the point. I am feeling your feelings...you've expressed them so clearly. IMHO, the three repeats of your immediate action is very appropo. Leaves me asking myself, does this work, if it does, for how long? And it has a decided rapid rhythm...a quick punch, a doubling over, a backing away, a standing up to shake it off and a relaxation. Maybe I should go get a swig of something, I've just been beat up and survived! Well done!

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anahata.c

3:14AM | Tue, 24 March 2009

I should just say "ditto" to Bill, he got it all. All I can really add (though he said it in other ways) is that your short, often one-word verse helps capture the 'breath' part of it, imitating single catch-up breaths after we've been through pain. Word parallels life. And "let the bad/air/out"—where you put 'air' and 'out' in one line each—slows the rhythm as if we were slowing down ourselves. Very well done Marilyn, and I hope the feeling itself is with you always. (Oh, ps: I like the pic, I assume part of a flower; very nice shot.)

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durleybeachbum

3:28AM | Tue, 24 March 2009

Well, Bill and mark are so much better with words than me....They have said exactly what I feel.

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lizzibell

3:34AM | Tue, 24 March 2009

Beautiful...

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magnus073

7:39AM | Tue, 24 March 2009

Very powerful work Marilyn and causes one to give pause

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3x3

11:43AM | Tue, 24 March 2009

lovely written x

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hipps13

11:47AM | Tue, 24 March 2009

wonderful work warm hug, Linda

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mickuk50

4:14PM | Tue, 24 March 2009

I think this could be your best yet as this is very powerful Marilyn :o) Mick

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auntietk

9:06PM | Tue, 24 March 2009

I wish there was audio, so we could read our poems as part of the RR experience. I can hear the way you read this ... it's beautifully done, and I feel relaxed all over again, reading it here!

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