Alone In The Dark ... (challenge piece) by auntietk
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Description
Alone In The Dark
Alone in the dark
I hear voices
At first just one
Then another
And another
Talking, talking
I can't quite make it out
It should make sense
But I don't know
Can't hear
Can't tell
What's being said
People talking
Just out of reach
Voices whispering
Almost words
Skritching against my brain
It's like another language
I feel I should know
A feather-light
Whisper
My mind scurries
Frantic for edges
Looking for light
For understanding
I stare into the abyss
Strain to find meaning
A snatch here
A wisp there
Like music
I may have known
In another life
Almost familiar
But it never quite
Comes together
I search for light
Hope for deliverance
But there is only darkness
I am the only one
Who doesn't understand
Afraid
Alone
Hearing voices
I feel like I'm
Going crazy
I never should
Have taken a job
In the tech department
I have no idea
What's going on
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I was motivated to write two pieces for the February/March challenge. This is the one that was posted to the challenge. I'll post the other one later.
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Cover sheet created in ArtRage and Photoshop
Font is Dragonwyck
Comments (19)
bmac62
Ha, super..., not knowing this was yours, I read it along with the other 16 in the challenge. I should have known...it has your voice...but I didn't pick up on it being yours. For seven descriptive verses I was lulled along thinking the writer is describing some tortured existance and then WHAMO...you brought this poor soul's plight right into an everyday occurance in everybody's office structure. I love it.
beachzz
yeah, this was great and the end was just the perfect twist!!
Faemike55
Wonderful - I think anyone in tech would be hearing voices before too long! and not too kindly ones at that
Chipka
What a killer ending! Funny, but I feel that way about Chicago, which is what makes this work so well...you've tapped into that all-too-human feeling of entrapment and it usually comes about in the way insanity does, only you're conscious of it, and aware that humans acting inhumanely (or mechanical, or electronic) are at the root of it. Wow.
durleybeachbum
Fabulous! what a great relief (in a way) at the end! That's the way I feel when people talk about maths type stuff. I have burst into tears in the bank before now!
fredster66
You do so well with these!!
helanker
A very beautiful one Tara.
flavia49
beautiful poem!
lucindawind
very cool writing ( as always my dear )
sandra46
a most wonderful poem!
PD154
Excellence again sweetie, such a wonderful verse.
lizzibell
excellent work...
anaber
Beautiful poem and challenge.
npauling
A great poem which describes the office situation to a tee. Very well done.
hipps13
wonderful work, Tara May warm hug, Linda
Merrylee
This is great Tara...the poem fits for a lot of things in life...like me learning to dance the cha cha...lol
anahata.c
yes, it's wonderful how you take us into this tortured soul's thoughts, and end up in the tech dept of an office. Very funny & very well done. Again, your short phrases are like breaths & sighs, even sights. And "Afraid/Alone" is nicely divided...I never voted for the challenge, just never got there to read them all. (I've barely caught up in the visual galleries! Ugh...) But I'm glad you posted this. When I first began, I thought it was more on the friend who has Parkinson's. But it's a mix of turmoil with humor. Very well done, tara. (And I love Chip's comment about chicago!) I always like reading your writing...
AndreiR
This is a wonderful poem! I don't know anything about tech dep. job, but the last part sounds like waking up from a dream ... or daydreaming.
ontar1
Beautiful poem!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!