SLAM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! by beachzz
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This started out with just two verses, the first and the last. Then as I looked at it, I realized it was sounding more like a country western tune. So, put on your boots, tap those toes, and sing along!!!
Slam!!!
I heard that door slam
When you walked out
You never said anything
Never told me why
You just left
You stole my heart
Broke it in half
Sent it back to me
In a million pieces
And made me cry
But I got you back
Fixed you good
When you weren't lookin
I took YOUR heart
And ripped it up
So now you can't love
And you can't feel
All you can do
Is walk around
Slammin doors
I walked out that same door
One sunny day
The world was bright
Full of promise
And I was grinnin from ear to ear
And I didn't slam the door
4/5/09
Comments (17)
bmac62
YeeeHaaa. This one comes with sound effects. Sing it Marilyn! Thanks for tipping your hand before you began or I probably would have been feeling extra bad for you throughout... I particularly like the word picture of the final person grinnin' from ear to ear.
magnus073
Great one Marilyn, love the lyrics
durleybeachbum
Brilliant!
flavia49
Great poem!!
sandra46
wonderful poem and composition!
3x3
very touching and emotional like someone broke your heart
hipps13
wonderful work warm hug, Linda
anaber
I like the poem.I feel it intense,but you classified it in the "genre humor" and i wouldn´t say that...Congratulations.
jocko500
dont let the door hit your behind. lol had to say that. cool words and image too
goodoleboy
Brings back bad memories of my second wife when she slammed the door behind her after an argument. I don't remember my first wife doing that though. She just seethed underneath, leaving a nasty note later. But enough of that...I don't want to ruin my day thinking about it. Anyway, more fine prose from your pen, and stellar texture depicted in the rustic image, Maz.
auntietk
Great stuff! Preach it, Sister! LOL!
Chipka
Oooh, I like this...especially that killer last line! It's so nice to have revenge in a sense and to have the foresight to not slam doors! Superb!
PD154
I can relate to this :)
vaggabondd
Wow this is great stuff lol. i love it
busi2ness
Triumphant ending Marilyn which gives meaning to the sadder parts.
anahata.c
yeah, terrific piece. You say it all succinctly and with real directness. It's a slap in the face, a slam of the door, and you take us through the moods, and you leave us feeling terrific in the end. Lot going on in a small space. And your photo is wonderful too. That's no 'accompaniment': It's a hard core shot all to itself, with the colors in the door, the textures all around, etc. I'll look in your earlier gallery for more...but this piece is terrific, and very uplifting, with a bang.
faroutsider
Well said! I love your triumphant, grinning exit - great song!