Wish You Weren't There by vaggabondd
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Description
Driving by
I see you sitting on your porch
Your hand under your chin
Resting your face
As you watch everyone drive by
There is a very far away look in your eyes
That I have seen many, many times myself
I feel the depression
Pouring out of your soul
Looking for someone
To it take away from you
But there is no one there
No one there today
Behind your fence
Setting on your porch
There is a dull hurt
That is great in size
And horrific in pain
That no one sees
Or takes time to see
That doesn't kill you
Just makes you wish you were dead
I know that place
My wayward friend
And I wish you weren't there
If you ever wondered how or where I come up with so many things to keep writing poetry about this is it. I was driving down the road on my way to the library just a few minutes ago and I saw this gal sitting behind this 6 foot chain link fence looking far far away. She looked to be mid 30's to me. Anyway sometimes I see people or things and it just makes me feel what I think they are feeling. Lol. I could be dead wrong to, who knows it might be her birthday and she is about to have a big party with friends but that is not what I felt when I saw her for that three seconds when I drove by. I hope everyone likes it. Randy
Comments (11)
BlackWidow77
...it's perfect. I know how that feels and you decribed it so perfectly. Your poems always touch me so much, but some more than others. This is one of the "...more than others.". Amazing job as always.
Faemike55
Great poem! You captured the feeling of depression perfectly. Understand too well about it and how a person wishes they weren't there! Well done!
Syltermermaid
Sometimes the small things in life inspire you!! Wonderful poem Randy!! Hugs Ute
flaviok
É bem assim meu amigo, a gente vê ou escuta, e derrepente está traduzindo em versos o que nos fez sentir. Brilhante poema. aplausos (5) It is as well my friend, we see or hear, and suddenly is translating into words what made us feel. Brilliant poem. applause (5)
bmac62
I like it Randy and I really like your explanation of how you become inspired to write...that's of big interest to me. I like reading your poems and I am always asking myself, "Wonder where that came from?" Now, I have a hint. Well done.
beachzz
Inspiration comes from many places. Whether that's what she was feeling or not, you felt something.
kasalin
Wonderful poem, dear Randy !!! Excellent work :):):)
CaperGirl42
Beautiful poem my friend- and yes- sometimes it is the smallest tresures in life that you hold the dearest to your heart! big hugz anne
Merrylee
Right now Randy I'm in the faraway place...like the TV says depression hurts...I do miss him..
The_D_List
very nice work
anahata.c
yes I like it too, and I understand how inspiration comes from these moments. Some writers got ideas for whole stories from a single 'snapshot' moment, just like this. You wrote this very nicely, and the way you brought it to your empathetic conclusion was both gentle and engaging, I was with you all the way to the end. Very sensitive and a very nice moment caught in its depth. And nice of you to explain the inspiration too. Sensitive work.