That Crazy Dance by beachzz
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Description
Earthquakes--
too many lately.
I was lucky--
many people were not.
That Crazy Dance
Rockin and
Rollin
Shakin
And shiverin
Jumpin and
Jivin
The earth
Danced
Its crazy
Jitterbug
The music
Of breaking
Glass
Filled the air
The unexpected
Concert
Caused buildings
To dance
Their
Asses off
It was a
Dance of death
And destruction
For some
Of those
Old places
For they
Really weren't
Strong enough
For such
A lively step
So today
We bury
Those old
Stalwarts
Brave
Strong
Indestructible
We thought
Brick by brick
They come down
And the music
Goes on
1/13/10
Comments (10)
bazza
Nice writing Marilyn well done, interesting photo..
Meisiekind
Oh my friend - I am weaping for the people of Haiti! The little that I saw on CNN and SKY is enough to make me think of them ALL the time... What powerful words in your soulful poem! Well done.
bmac62
A great way to wrap up all your experiences of the earthquake and to broadcast them to us who live in Kansas where we only have to duck a couple of hundred tornatoes a year and over flowing springtime rivers to include the swift flowing Missouri River about a mile from where I live. I marvel at your informal style of poetry. You get so much emotion transmitted. You are a real wordsmith.
anahata.c
yes with bill, you're a wordsmith, getting a lot into a few words; and you used rhyme too & rhythm very well, as you always do. And yes with Carin: The Haiti earthquake is a devastation, more devastating with each hour, it appears. Having heard your explanation that alot had to do with building code, it is all the more tragic. Your poem gets the sense that most of us only read about (in earthquakes); and your image must be how you feel when it hits. Let's hope there is some rescue for Haiti; and I'm very glad the N. California quake left only some property damage & nothing else. And as bill says, I too love your way with words and how much emotion you transmit in them. It's amazing how one moment's jolt can have such overwhelming results...
auntietk
I love the visual of your poem ... the line length is a seismograph, charting the waves of the quake.
durleybeachbum
So good..I see what Tara points out..excellent.
ShadowsNTime
Awesome, thats exactly how it is in a quake, the image too! The last big one that Seattle had, I watched my walls turn 'liquid', as if they were melting. I was sitting in a chair with rollers so I couldn't even get to a doorway...and the sound was like a freight train barreling straight at you, that was the worst I have ever been in. I like Tara's comment, she is right on!Brilliant poem!
goodoleboy
Interesting concept on display to reflect your reaction to the moderate tremor you experienced in your area. I've lived through tons of earthquakes in my time, some minor, some very major...even one that I experienced while ushering in a movie theater decades ago. Was almost bowled over by wild eyed people in the subsequent panic. And nothing like the swing and sway of being on the 30th floor of a building when one strikes. One bad thing about earthquakes, compared to other disasters of nature, is that you receive no previous warning before it hits.
hipps13
wonderful work warm hugs, Linda
danapommet
We only have hurricanes in south Florida, so I can’t imagine the power of what happened to you. But only a few broken things. Very powerful words Marilyn. Thank you for sharing them. You must be thankful as you see the news out of Haiti. Dana