Firewalk by rdf
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When I look beyond the embers still glowing on the path behind us, sometimes I miss the firewalk, walking the fires with you, and the keeping of the flame.
While the world rolls away beneath us in a great noiseless wind, sometimes I am as still as stone in pondering answers I still cannot guess, and I cry aloud.
When I look across the wide seas of our dreams and the days remote, sometimes I still dream of riding the tempests, and I wonder.
Who then, if not I, could have answered the summons?
And still I ponder of our demise, of the night that rushed too soon to greet us, still, alone, standing before the door of a silent and empty house with the anguish of a mind in doubt, loathing to stay, dreading to leave, fearing to go back again, and knowing we might have done worse.
Do the scattered embers, glowing, yet burn your flesh?
I only ask, you see, because sometimes I do miss the firewalk, walking the fires with you and, in the storms of time and experience and against the mighty stars, the keeping of the flame.
Comments (3)
tjames
So are you inferring that only one of the pair is dead, because of the question do the scattered embers still burn your flesh? And yet I poder of our demise would say the opposite. And the embers are behind us as well. I only criticize poems I read over several times and I like this poem but it needs work.
rdf
Thanks for the comments. My X had no trouble understanding it. It is simply about our split and the demise of our dreams together. The 'fire' is the fire of our love/passion, i.e., the 'keeping of the flame' is a reference to the effort of trying to keep our love and passion alive against all the circumstances that often seemed to conspire against us. It's all symbolic. We were together for 10 years and some of it probably has implicit shared meanings between us, and, I realize now -- too late -- that it is perhaps too personal to post here.
Gini
It IS very personal but a good piece of writing and the personal is what makes it work for me. I realised straight away that it is about a failed/finished relationship. How sad the "Who then, if not I, could have answered the summons? " I like it very much.