The End by naria
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Standing on the edge
Jagged rocks far below
White water splashes
She closes her eyes
Dreams of her angel
Feeling his gentle caress
Hearing the crashing waves
Looks down to the deep
Steps back from death
Questioning;
Why did he leave me?
Did I do something wrong?
Louder now; the water
The sea calling her name
Forward she strides
Glances down a final time
One step forward
Angelically she soars
With questions unanswered
Farther she falls
To; the end!
Comments (4)
Bonzodog
The great sadness of the subject will, probably, turn people off. As you are capable of creating a sad mood perhaps you could equally create a happy one?
naria
Well, for me, the reason that I write of such sadness and suicidal topics is because I like to get inside the human mind and try to figure out why someone would want to kill themselves, or someone else, or whatever. I cannot help what comes from my head to my pen, I just write. I have written so far a total of 38 poems and do have many topics of delight but there are parts of them that I just cannot seem to get right or are too sexually invovled, etc The poems that i post on here are the ones i try to get the unique reactions to. IDK maybe i'm going about posting all wrong. But thank you all for your comments and suggestions :-) ~Naria
Anugama
Very good writing and word construction, nothing wrong with this piece at all! :) Poems of sadness will attract people not put them off because people enjoy to delve into peoples souls and know their troubles. People are often moved deeply by anothers words whether they are about joy or tears... Generally speaking we are all happy to get caught up in the emotional dramas of anothers life!
Jalen
again no writngs or poetry can b judged wrong...its self expression..and u describe this so vividly and n e number of events make a person feel there is nothing left in their life but pain...jalen