Promise by BlueLotus7
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Be still my love, don't say a word!
Grant me at least the honor of a silent goodbye
I knew it was coming, my intuition I suppose
Your eyes say it all, what you're actions conceal
I no longer amuse you and you find it difficult
To fake interest in my mundane conversation
We have not touched in ever so long
And when we do--purely accidental, of course
You pull away then recover quite awkwardly
The kisses have dwindled and I have to ask
For the occasional hug given without emotion
Nothing you could say will ease the pain
Nothing I could do will make you stay
Why should I struggle with wings broken
When you have already decided without my say
With your silence I have been judged and
Our life together condemned without a retrial
It makes no difference if I never know why
The outcome is the same: on my own once more
But, for tonight, could you act the part
Of being attentive and loving, like you
Used to be when accepting the Best Actor award?
We shall dine by candleglow and crystal then
Dance beneath the heavens above that gaze below
And we shall walk holding hands on the same
Street where you held me in the air and laughed
You have my promise...my solemn word...
That when we return home I will require
Only to be held tightly within your embrace
Then before you wake...I will be gone.
Comments (17)
pscott
So sad, my friend. Such a feeling of loss in your words. Wonderfully written and so heart-felt.
annemarie2
Your writing amazes me-- excellent job :)
ScarlettWoman
so sad and so emotionally wrenching...brings back some harsh memories that I, thankfully, got thru, and made a better life for myself...excellent conveyance of the emotions involved.
meico
So painful, yet at the end so brave and so tender. Sadly, the scenario is horribly familiar, but at least that enables me to vouch for the authenticity of emotion and the expressive power of your words.
katili
Oh it's so sad and the part that asks for one more night and promises that the person leaves before the other one wakes up... words of hurt but also accepting the obvious. A poem of love not being for sale, it is or isn't.
PandyGirl
oh yeah i sooo been there and know exactly how it feels and even had those thoughts run through my head.
SK2Design
This is such a sad and haunting piece and your use of words has given it such emotional depth that it captures the reader completely. Exceptional piece!
Avalonne
This soooo sounds like the last two years of my marriage, before it totally fell apart. You have lived it too, as is obvious from your words. Touching and sad, and so very very true....
SpiritofGabriel
I was doing fine till I read your words and now the tears flow again. That is what my heart has been screaming that I couldn't put to words. Thank you. Part of me wants that one last time - the smart part of me says F_it!
digi-b
Really thought provoking. I hope I never go through is. I'm going to go give June a hug and tell her how much I love her.
romanceworks
Touching and tender. You really capture the pathos of an ending love affair. Gorgeous and very romantic writing. :o) CC
Sylvia
Words that travel through the mind and make a nest in the Heart!! OUTSTANDING!!
SophiaDeer
Superb work!!
pjaj
Excellent job as always!!
Metonicus
Unfortunately, my wife could have written this.
calum5
Moving beautifull and deep!Marvelous :-)bye calum
chucksiebuhr
Beautifully written with the insight of one who has, sadly, "been there"...understood completely by others who have shared the same. Haunting, indeed...as some things may be accepted, but never really forgotten.