One More Chance by Matrus
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Description
Distant fields have grown to dust
And ancient tools have turned to rust
Nothing is left that will remind
The path of nature will rewind
There was no violence and no fear
Just one sadness troubled tear
Is falling down on broken ground
Into a crack, not to be found
We had hope, but now it’s gone
Regretting all what we have done
All we had built is now unmade
Our existence, will shortly fade
For we have never had the aim
To reach the stars, for worlds to claim
Just one more time, life has the chance
To leave this world, it must enhance
Just one more chance till earth will breed
And die inside our sun's new heat
Comments (3)
topman12
There is no image...but the words are excellent
Matrus
Well, maybe there will be an image some day, but I put it in the cathegory "writers" because it has no image.
cagewench
I think you lost some of the rythmn of this by adhering to rhyme and also some of the visuals that could have helped this really grab the reader. Also, though you stuck to rhyming all the way through, the end didn't rhyme.