Faerie Saga 04 - Fourteen Forevers by erviin

Writers • Romance • posted on Feb 10, 2005

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***WARNING***
Lousy Writing Ahead
You've been warned

Fourteen Forevers

It's been two weeks
since we were together.
Just fourteen days,
but feels like forever.

How long since we had
quality time together?
With no clocks, no fatigue
just you and I, wherever.

You already know how much
my caresses miss your skin
and my glance your eyes
and my kisses your lips.

What you don't know
is that I find my self
thinking, wondering...
Am I missed? Am I desired?
Has someone taken
even for a single moment
what I wish to be just mine?

ErViIn (AKA VKNG)

I wished she'd be my Faerie, though I knew she was not mine. And I found my self wondering about the Faerie's wereabouts and her feelings towards me.

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Comments (3)

tony_br22

11:28PM | Thu, 10 February 2005

hi, beautiful words !!! .. superb done erviin

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TallPockets

3:50AM | Fri, 11 February 2005

"Absence makes the heart grow fonder". Well done.

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KarenJ

7:02PM | Fri, 11 February 2005

"You already know how much/my caresses miss your skin/and my glance your eyes/and my kisses your lips." This first two lines of this work well but the last two seem to be struggling. Probably isn't helped by the transition from rhyme to non-rhyme. It's an excellent piece on the classic theme of "absence makes the heart grow fonder" but for me it needs to decide whether it's a classic rhyming piece or free verse... just my opinion of course ;-)