i did not die, i just went to hide by irenicusknightingale

Writers • Atmosphere/Mood • posted on Mar 18, 2005

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I am not there You did not care I am the dream I am not what I seam I watch from above My eyes filled with love And I watch the Train Through the rain As it comes closer And closer, There I died No one cried Now i watch from heaven My daughter, near eleven So my friend Please just pretend I did not die I just went to hide This was written for Abigail (in the picture showing) her mother died in a car crash five years ago, so I wrote this poem about her, I am only 13 so It may not be fantastic, but I would appreciate any feedback left

Comments (7)

millermax

2:28PM | Fri, 18 March 2005

I FEEL YOUR ANGER SARROW PAIN AND I ALSO FEEL YOU JOY HAPPINESS AND LOVE YOU HAVE DONE GREAT

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Meezan

8:59AM | Sat, 19 March 2005

I can almost feel your compassion coming out of this piece. Good work. One advice I must give to you, dont try to be fantastic, no one writes so that he/she can impress other people. You should always be true to yourself and what you are trying to say. Make your work honest, not comercial. Some may disagree to this but thats what I think. Cheers.

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Unicornst

8:10PM | Sat, 19 March 2005

Jessika, you did a wonderful job on this and I hope it can comfort your friend in some way.

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Faewind

10:09PM | Sat, 19 March 2005

Very well put. It says everything perfectly, and it was very poignant.

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jocko500

12:44AM | Sun, 20 March 2005

real good one

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micsteel

9:55PM | Thu, 28 April 2005

Both your poetry AND your graphic are excellent works of art: Simply done, but deeply emotive, very effective! BRAVO!

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bobbystahr

8:31PM | Thu, 12 May 2005

I'm sure you friend Abigail was comforted by this...shows compassion on your part that a lot of folks never achieve...develop this tendency and you'll have a rewarding life..... peace bobby stahr