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Subject: The Empty Hall


jstro ( ) posted Mon, 28 January 2008 at 5:32 PM · edited Tue, 21 January 2025 at 3:52 AM

The Empty Hall
J. M. Strother

Brown leaves scatter on the wind
Dancing through the empty hall
Seen by none, and so forgotten
Where once, life was joy for all.

Jesters, bards, have long departed
Dancers, here, no longer twirl
Darkness creeps through open doorway,
Banners lie in shadow, furled.

 
~jon
My Blog - Mad Utopia Writing in a new era.


ARTWITHIN ( ) posted Mon, 28 January 2008 at 8:23 PM

So much in such a small space.   This also applies to a variety of situations, allowing the readers to let it play in their memories.  Sometimes, I wish I had the ability to see film that runs in their minds when they read poetry.

Excellent wordsmithery! ;-)

Zann



“Music is harmony, harmony is perfection, perfection is our dream, and our dream is heaven”
Henri Frederic Amiel

 


mamabobbijo ( ) posted Mon, 04 February 2008 at 10:48 AM

I feel as if I'm wandering through an abandoned castle, and have stumbled into the great hall. Lovely images this evokes.


jstro ( ) posted Tue, 05 February 2008 at 5:01 PM

Thank you both for the kind words.
~jon

 
~jon
My Blog - Mad Utopia Writing in a new era.


ColdWarTendencies ( ) posted Tue, 05 February 2008 at 6:11 PM

The title definetly live's up to the poem,
Beautifully constrcuted & invokes image's!
 More , More , More :)


hanevi ( ) posted Tue, 19 February 2008 at 2:36 AM

Hello Jon!
Lovely words to read after I wander back to the forum after months of absence, and probably wander off again for months...

Hope you're well.

Best wishes,
hanevi.


jstro ( ) posted Mon, 25 February 2008 at 3:53 PM

Hello, hanevi. I know life often gets in the way, but try not to be a stranger. Good to hear from you again.

Thanks for the kind words, CWT.
~jon

 
~jon
My Blog - Mad Utopia Writing in a new era.


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