Rogue Trooper scenario: "One risk too many": comic-strip in 39 frames, at this address. I welcome all comments and criticisms. All frames are 1700 x 1000 pixels.

http://larashots.com/appleyard/rogue_trooper_scenario/39frames/_images.htm

After reading each frame, press "back" to get back to the index page.

great work good story hope to see more

I haven't looked through all the pages, so this is just an initial feedback thing.

I think you would be better off organizing your frames as a normal comic book. A good suggestion are the books by Will Eisner called Comics and Sequential arts. Amazon and Story telling and visual narrative also by Will Eisner - Amazon

Both of these are very good at explaining how to design comics, storytelling, framing, using light and shadows and expressions in comic art, so highly recommend those.

The reason why i think it would be a good idea, is because when a lot of things aint happening on each page, it quickly gets annoying switching between pages so you kind of loose track of things.

I also think your images could use a bit more diversity and depth or they will quickly appear a bit flat. So maybe get some shadows in there, different textures etc. Lighting can really help with doing this. For instant you can place items outside the view of the camera which only purpose is to cast interesting shadows etc.

Using the camera in varies ways can also create some very interesting views. For instant it seems like you frame all or try to frame figures as a whole, meaning you see them in full figure from head to toe. However since you are making a comic, you don't need to show everything because its a story, so one image is carried to the next. What i mean is, for instant one image a soldier might be shooting his weapons at someone, and you see this person in full figure, so the next image can easily be a close up of his expression for instant, because the reader already know what this soldier is doing from the last frame, so they carry the story with them from one frame to another.

Last thing i would do is to change the font type its a bit "robotic" or what to say. My suggestion is to go to dafont.com, they have a huge amount of free and very good comic ,cartoon and handwritten fonts you can use for free.

Anyway as i said haven't looked through all pages, so its just my initial impression and know its a lot of work making a whole comic.

I haven't looked through all the pages, so this is just an initial feedback thing. .....

Thanks for the ideas. I was treating each frame as a separate still image. ("Art", not "Arts".)

http://www.floobynooby.com/pdfs/Will_Eisner-Theory_of_Comics_and_Sequential_Art.pdf (32 megabytes)

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Comics_and_Sequential_Art

http://self-help-ebook.net/3728-graphic-storytelling-and-visual-narrative-will.html

Good story. I would like shadows on though. otherwise love the pictures. I actually only intended to take a quick look but it was quite gripping so I read all of it. Love esther

I have remade (but not uploaded) the images with shadowing, and I am part way through adding the speech and thought balloons and comment boxes to them.

In most of the scenes inside the factory, I set all 3 lights to 300% intensity, to represent everybody's eyes adjusting to the low light inside, as all light is outside light coming in through the factory's windows

that was clever!

I have updated http://larashots.com/appleyard/rogue_trooper_scenario/39frames/_images.htm with images rendered with shadowing, as asked.

well they don't all have shadows, but certainly the ones with shadows look a lot better. Good work AA!

Good work, though I do echo the other statements about page layout and shadows. It's nice to see the P4 Dork utilized, but I would like to see some variety in the faces. I realize the characters are masked, but you should still be able to change the faces and see that in the little skin shown around the eyes.

I do a comic myself with poser, and I'd be happy to give you some pointers if you want them

I find your text stories entertaining also... I tend to agree with the points raised here by others.

A couple of other resources for you if you're interested... I thought this book by Scott McCloud was really excellent, it's highly regarded on the topic

Understanding Comics

Another good comic font resource (free and paid)

http://www.blambot.com

This Rogue Trooper image series is now at [http://www.aappleyard.com/rogue_trooper_scenario/39frames/_images.htm]http://www.aappleyard.com/rogue_trooper_scenario/39frames/_images.htm)