Just stop! by SusiQ
Close
Hover over top left image to zoom.
Click anywhere to exit.
Members remain the original copyright holder in all their materials here at Renderosity. Use of any of their material inconsistent with the terms and conditions set forth is prohibited and is considered an infringement of the copyrights of the respective holders unless specially stated otherwise.
Description
I had no idea what to post today. I came up with this funny little poem that doesn't conform to any style that I know of.
It's dedicated to all those insomniacs out there.
------------------------------
Your mind is running
jumping
dipping
Flowing over the brim of your cup
Just stop.
These thoughts are too mad
escaping
evading
and fleeing your hold and control
Just stop.
While you are lying
tossing
reclining
waiting for sleep to enfold
Just stop
Breathe in deep
rhythmic
in time
to the tick of your clock
Just stop.
Comments (10)
PeeWee05
nice of you to think of the ppl who can't sleep, at leas they'll have somethign to read now :D Cool peom by the way. That's the way I like them, new and unique...
RGUS
You're such a dag...had to look around the room tosee if you saw me her at 5 past 2 in hte morning... ok ok...I've been in bed for about 4 hours... no need to remind me I'm a dumb bugger and shoul dbe asleep... byt how did you know I was awake... Hmmmmmm! (V)
SusiQ
Lol @ Deane. You should stop turning yourself on with all those erotic models you render on poser. Maybe that way you'd be able to get some sleep. ;o) Thanks PW. I've been there tossing and turning myself quite often.
busi2ness
The rythm of the poem reminds of a clock ticking away. Fortuantely I don't know what it us to lie awake for long.
Wolfspirit
Susie, and interesting poem, as yes, I too am a member of the up all night, and day club.Thus, thank you for this delightful little poem.Yet, as strange as this may soundmy mind after all alone commands my heart to beat keeping me alive, thus I figure, just with that alone I am thankful, and if I find I cannot sleepwhat is it that is keeping rest from me? It is my mind that craves a new lesson I have it yet to feed (read) or it is its own desires to create, (write, or some other art form) and why hold it back? After all it does for me. Besides as we all know, time waits for no man, or no mind and each heart only has so much time. (Just a thought as I too have often once upon a time pondered, why am I still awake?)
vaggabondd
Maybe it is a writer thing. I have a hard time falling to sleep. lol. very nice i can really relate to it.
lordlunder
indeed
6T6
Excellent, why the feel the need to conform? Let's just stop.
TallPockets
Beautifully, written work, Miss SusiQ! -- "I" have NO trouble putting others to 'sleep'. T.P.
btm1228
If only I could make my mind "just stop", Oh what a releif it would be.... Cute poem. Originality was a good thing last time I checked, so why conform;)...Ben