~~Impressions & Atmosphere~~ by Blush
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Description
The half sipped cup of French Vanilla coffee sits
apologizing for only half waking the news reporter
The abandoned cigarette is left
smoldering in its tray...
grey smoke curls up,up,up
uncoiling...
much to the chagrin and anxiety of its owner
The piano in the corner sits
remembering its music
Waiting for the musician's caress
while past conversations ring
faintly in the air
like tiny silver bells in the wind...
The empty place has become so cluttered
with the memory
of faces that no longer come around
How careless people are
to leave their personalities
hanging in the air
like atmosphere~
Comments (20)
vjerana
Thank you my dear to share your poetry! I love it!!! Excellent!!!
wildfire2003
I feel that when I enter someones home. Sometimes the feeling can be very oppressive, other times warm and comforting. Nice capture!
danob
A poets heart and an eye for beauty perhaps you need an image to go with your words hugz
qmont
Susan, when I read this, my mind transports back to Bogart, and I picture the nightclub in Cassablanca, your words are so bueatiful, and let's our minds explore there own meanings, the skill of a true writer at work. Please keep them comning.................John
Elfenone
Beautiful! A wonderful piece.. Keep them up hon.. beautifully done.
Bothellite
It pulled me in but really grabbed hold in the last seven lines. Excellent.
MBooker
This was really freaky to read because I was just having muh morning ciggy and coffee and had some soft music going to get me up for todays chores. Anyway this touched me I loved it please I would love to read more very soon. ~hugzzzzz~ keep up the good work
highcrow
Beautiful verse Susan.You are truly gifted.Your imagery is subtle yet very effective.You have created a wonderful mood with your words.Very eloquent beautiful work!V
redbeard
Wonderful imagery, the idea of personalities hanging in the air is fascinating. I love the atmosphere you created here by all of the little details. Very nice poem.
B_PEACOCK
Very cool .I agree with my friend Jack aka Redbeard
DennisReed
A truly lovely piece! So wonderful, but so sad! I still haunt my old haunts from time to time! :) Bravo!
Shadane
a lovely piee my friend - a truely lovely piece
ObsidianLogic
grin i could see it so clearly reminded me of one of those ghost paintings where the main room is in full focus and the outline of the past is bearly visibal yet still so there
cynlee
reminds me also of the oldtime detective news reporter in a coffee shop... studying the memories of faces gone by... wonderful imagery susan! :]
Dinalt
Great mood to this verse, superbly observed & described.
roadrunner69
Well, you made a great 'impression' on me with this work .... and, you improved my 'atmosphere' .... so, in keeping with the earlier above reference comments of 'Casablanca' .... "Write it again,Susan".
meico
Traces of people left in inanimate objects ... a striking metaphor and extremely well presented and developed.
sheilakalajdzic
I love this piece a lot, susan...how you made made the room a life unto itself...The space we live in does indeed tell a story, and there's so much we can learn from someone by taking a peek into the window of their private world. A wonderful story you've told from the perspective of the room! Vote!
avalonfaayre
How talented you are to be able to use mere words to paint a story, a beautiful picture.
myrrhluz
Absolutely beautiful! You paint an image within an image. The memories left in a place, like smoke on a glass. Marvelous poem! I love it!