Elusive Thoughts by pscott
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I rest my head on my arms,
my eyes stare into a daydream,
and I think.
If the words would flow
as easy as the coffee I have poured
into my nervous system,
I would be done.
But they do no soft shoe,
onto paper
any faster with caffeine.
Instead, I am anxious.
I feel an idea
just under the surface of my thoughts.
It is so close,
so tangible,
so many millions of miles away.
It is a feather brushed with a breeze
to float on the rim of awareness.
And as I reach for it
a current of air from the movement
of my eyes
forces it further,
further
than the tendrils of consciousness
can reach.
And still, through gritted teeth,
the idea lives to mock me
with elusiveness.
My frozen body,
tilted,
unmoving,
is not a receptacle
for the one thought
which is now afloat
on the edge of creative vision.
If I confront the inspiration
the motion will destroy the moment
and the notion will quiver in the wave
to tease me.
Frustration is not a writer
Comments (19)
hobbit
The image fits the poem perfectly,,, nice.
paragon5
Wonderful poem and a very nice fractal image to fo with it! Great work!
locomouse
The poem is beautifully written ... and your image is crafted equally well. They are perfect partners. Bravo! :)
meico
This poem illustrates superbly the frustration of the creative process without falling into the abyss of bathos ... a trap for the unwary. This, my good friend, you most certainly are not ... it is very clear you have carefully and successfully avoided any sentimental mawkishness or overweening inteelectual arrogance which is so often a feature of attempts at this subject. The poem is refreshingly direct but not without a deliciously genteel elegance of expression. Most importantly it is about a real person doing real things and is utterly believable. Bravo, my friend ... you win my admiration at least. The fractal art is [as hobbit observes] a totally appropriate foil for your words: red, black and white work so well together as passion and elan combined.
vjerana
Excellent image and poem!!!:)
RodolfoCiminelli
Excellent fractal, and very beautiful dark colors and forms....!!
Darkangel764
The fractal and the poem go together perfectly, excellent work!
roadrunner69
Pscott wrote:"It has won, this feather of thought. I am defeated, and feel my humanity once again." ....PAT .... methinks maybe because you, at one point in the writing process (or life, for that matter), 'accepted' so-called 'defeat' and 'felt' your 'humanity', that you were 'then' able to be 'you' and write all that you 'are'??? .... Now, young lady .... the FRACTAL is gorgeous!!! .... VOTE .... brian.
kansas
I have not the eloquent words of the previous writers of comments. But the verses are meaningful to me and the fractal displays what the words say. Wonderful and beautiful.
jas55
On fifth viewing, I find the disconcerting sensuality delicious....disconcerting because in what seems a viscerally futuristic but art deco visual vocabulary, the image speaks soothingly of wine-blood satin on the thighs of 40s Hollywood sex queens.....but then I love and dig the pleasure of discovering the wooden cigar store Indian profile (with Patrick Stewart lid, no less!) and the feeling of space kids coming at me in their vehicles made of imagination and many breasts inviting one and all to loosen up and not think so much....this fractal's much more sexy than the would-be sexual pablum elsewhere on the site....I also find many scenes of creatures having it out and a kind of jewellery that jiggles in this place of aesthetic play....yep, I like it.....do more, please, and forget everything else like sleeping, eating and having a pint....but don't you dare stop inspiring others with the beauty of your work.....more, please...much more....and thank you as always
D.C.Monteny
Great twin creation. It's a bit hard to decide which of the two works i like best, because they are both very powerful. Poem first then. Got an immediate feel of "been there ..." Haven't we all? grin But either way, it is beautifuly written with a nice rhythm to it. Then the fractal ... There are such strong and open associations there and the colours are to die for ... a couple of times. In short, V !!!
whirlingfeather
Superb visual stimulation, it has prompted me to take a closer look at your work. Impressive writing, I must say. It is a talent I lack and so admire in others. Your image displays the struggles in your writing well. I have enjoyed the combination of the two very much. Looking forward to more of your work.
ronwindham
great design on colors.
kimpe
Beautiful work, love the design and the colors! A beautiful render.
fractalinda
Both your written and visual expressions flow beautifully, despite the chaos of thought and design and the resulting frustration from which the poem and image evolved. A powerful and creative treatise on the peaks and valleys inherent in artistic endeavor. The image is rich and dramatic and beautiful, by the way.
classyladytwo
v both are beautiful pieces of art work done is a very Klassy manner lovely work stunning beauty colors in the fractal are gorgeous you certainly are a true artist. excellently done on both of them
Jalen
i read it and it sounded like a winner to me..ur a true artist of words...something im still hoping to be able to do someday...hugs love and God Bless my friend...hope life is being to gentle to ya....Laura:0)))))
Snow_Angel
Pat I love your poem and this fractal is gorgeous! Very different and unique!I can relate to your thoughts in this poem and feel the frustrations you felt during the creative processes! Very excellent work! V :)
CarolSassy
Sounds kinda frustrating, but there are many ups and downs to creating and writing. You have to take the good with the bad. This is a very nice way to express a part of that. Very enjoyable poem. (: ...oh, and the fractal is lovely! lol q-: