ki'dor ..? by ObsidianLogic

Writers • Fantasy • posted on Dec 06, 2004

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Davina purnell April 17, 2001 THE RINGS OF KI

Comments (29)

Elfenberry

11:47AM | Mon, 06 December 2004

A wonderful story capsule... I love the fact that she is thinking of having "fun" in the face of sheer danger. I read the whole thing.. Excellent.

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LadyFire_Ice

12:30PM | Mon, 06 December 2004

Wonderful writing,, Exceptional++++ Hugsssss Linda :-)

mutedbanshee

12:35PM | Mon, 06 December 2004

As always Davina exceptional writing, i miss all too much of your talented work hunnie,i will be sure to catch up when i am feeling better Much love and congratualtions again on another wonderful writing T~

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antje

12:56PM | Mon, 06 December 2004

Wonderful writing! I wish I had talent like this :o) I can barely come up with a title to my images hehe :o)

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DennisReed

1:04PM | Mon, 06 December 2004

Magnificently written and a delight to read! Bravo, and more, More, MORE! :) BTW, was this BOOK ever published, if not, it should be!

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JenniSjoberg

1:27PM | Mon, 06 December 2004

Wonderful! absolutely wonderful!

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Elfenone

1:46PM | Mon, 06 December 2004

Oh I think this is beautiful, it has a little LOTR flare to it. I think it's the whole ring thing. Clever job putting a riddle in it. Setting the tone for an adventure. That's very well done.

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ObsidianLogic

1:54PM | Mon, 06 December 2004

no it has not been published its only about 15 pages long and a work in progress as are all 4 of my books lol but it will be finished on day and hopefully find a home in lots of book shelves ...i am a hopefull if not procrastinating writer .. that some one will go ""damm your good i want to publish your work here is your advance "" on that day i will dance a jig that will rock the world !!!!

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i-popba

1:58PM | Mon, 06 December 2004

Ohh..!!! woww..!! Wonderful writing,.you are amazing my friend.!..so coo.....l love it..!!

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Andi3d

2:14PM | Mon, 06 December 2004

nooooo.....you can't just leave it there!!! i'll be wondering where it's going now, for days to come. Please let us have some more... :-))

RobinBanks

2:24PM | Mon, 06 December 2004

Nicely done workings and machinations in there,nice of her elders to "Know" but keep the girl totally in the dark,at least the Fairy King was a help..and not out to simply be a pest. The story has much promise I'd think if this bit is an indication it'll be a pleasant read.

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DarkStarRising

2:35PM | Mon, 06 December 2004

wow, what a story, was grpiied to my dseat, and enjoyed every moment! excellent, truely excellent story writting!

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DarkStarBurning

3:22PM | Mon, 06 December 2004

I don't spend much time going through the Writer's gallery. You've persuaded me otherwise :o) A little gem.... M x

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Zacko

5:05PM | Mon, 06 December 2004

Excellent work ObsLog!!! I seldom have the patience to read anything, but im glad i did this time :) You are very talented and Im sorry I havent seen that til now. Fantastic!!! Thanks for inviting me ;)

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shaybear

5:25PM | Mon, 06 December 2004

this is very well written hun... we should work together sometime :) MUAH!! ~shay~

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FreeBass

6:33PM | Mon, 06 December 2004

Good story 8-) A few typoos &puncuational errors, ut WTF...I still unnerstood it ;-) I wanna read rest!

tony_br22

7:33PM | Mon, 06 December 2004

superb ObsidianLogic.

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kansas

8:43PM | Mon, 06 December 2004

Thanks for inviting me to read your fantasy tale. Hope you will continue it. As FreeBass said: a number of typing, spelling, and punctuation errors.

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Fatale

11:59PM | Mon, 06 December 2004

i'm no writer, but this good work thus far.. keep up the good work!

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calum5

4:09AM | Tue, 07 December 2004

Davina as ever your work is remarkable!Thats quite a story so far ,many chapters and ordeals await her,yes I would like to read more!I think evrtyone has there own perceptions to what this world and characters look like,do you illustrate with in books.I normally bore in text veru quickly,I dont when reading from you.Bye calum

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meico

6:08AM | Tue, 07 December 2004

An absorbing story superbly told. It held my interest thoroughout and left me wanting more. V

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paragon5

8:05AM | Tue, 07 December 2004

Outstanding work Davina, I didn't know you were so talented! This story does need to be published it's fantastic! I agree with meico, I want more!!!!

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Moebius87

9:05AM | Tue, 07 December 2004

You have a definite talent for story telling. My only real critical input would be that you might want to run this through a spell checker first. The pacing of the sentences is uneven and choppy, sometimes it is very effective for conversation and actions, but when setting up the imagery of the scene it helps to make the descriptive flow better. I enjoyed the character and story, reminiscent of early Anne McCaffrey "Pern" or even Ursula K. LeGuin "Earthsea". Keep at it!

british_rob

1:45AM | Thu, 09 December 2004

hey cool perhaps yopu could help with my manuscript im gonna be doing = ) great story

Eaglespirit

10:32PM | Thu, 09 December 2004

excellent story writing...now, lets hear the rest. I don't like like stoppin' in the middle of a good tale!

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Rykk

11:25PM | Thu, 09 December 2004

A VERY cool and interesting story you've started here! I sure hope you write more because I'm really wanting to find out how they tame the stallion and all the things that will happen to Mayanna along the way. I hope you'll let me know when the nest installment is posted - VERY well done!

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