The Prophet Did Not Tell by FlutterbyeJo
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Uhh, feel free to tell me exactly what you think, never really done anything like this before, eep!
Spitting eyes
the acid burns
spirits fade away.
An empty shell
is left alone
...glow...
long ago gone.
Once lived to see
to tell of tales
of far fetched
dizzying heights.
The prophet did not tell
of woe, of bad times
still to come.
His mouth closed, sealed
he led you blind to
the life you left behind.
Comments (8)
netsia
Hi Jo, good to see you here :) I think this is awesome. I espeially like this part: "His mouth closed, sealed he led you blind to the life you left behind." Not just irony there but tragedy. V
FlutterbyeJo
Wow thanks, didn't expect that as a reaction, thanks again x
NothingNess
I think this is great writting. I like your style and how you structured all the words.
meico
Good to read your work again ... and this tightly-worded and dramatic piece certainly does not disappoint. But if prophets did tell, we'd never act - so maybe the neglect is deliberate, and, over time maybe for the best.
FlutterbyeJo
Thank you so much for all this support :) it means so much as this is the first of this less 'typical' poetry I have attempted to write. Jo x
Shadowmonkey
Its very good and is so very readable with such a flowing prose to it.
TallPockets
Excellent piece. VOTE Btw-imho-there is no such thing as 'typical'. If that was all that was allowed, TallPockets would be off writing stuff no one would ever read. (Ooops! Now I understand - WINK).
FlutterbyeJo
OMG these responses mean so very much to me... I can't thank you all enough. I've been on a big self esteem low for a while and this has boosted me no end....thanks :) x x x x x (one each lol)