All you are lacking are the TV listings :) All looks good to me

heya darth; if it were me... i'd airbrush erase around the edges of some of those clippings so they look more at home with the background. (though if you like the torn paper look, then you did a good job!) another thing that strikes me as a bit strange... the black and white sci-c logo thingy... looks like the publisher mark (or whatever it's called) on the corners of comic books? but it is bigger and bolder than the main title, 'layers,' and i find that it competes for attention too much... and tends to win. i would shrink it down so the whole black&white part is the size of the letter L or smaller.

I think the image is very good but I agree with bloodsong about the ragged clippings.....I also noticed her left hand/wrist looked a little twisted and it appears like the background is coming through.. Was this intentional? ... By the way is that Steve Shanks flares on the girl and did you make the texture for them?... I like 'em! =)

oooh, byte me, you are right...the wrist is screwed didn't even see it. The Flares are just standard p4 woman jeans with the bottoms tapered, and I modified an existing blue jeans texture..thanks :)

My harshest criticism is that you are a worthless carbon unit, your entire species is doomed to extinction as soon as a couple more cockroaches mutate just a little more in the right direction, your art, monuments and music are nothing more than transient eructations in the cosmic timeline...and your mother dresses you funny..... Scarab and Ebert (two thumbs up)

Okay, you asked for it... ;) After staring at the cover for a while I think I gathered what it's suppose to portray: A woman emerging from some kind of time travel/transport swirl. The images around her relate to the things the swirl has effected. Kennedy, Christ, piramids, UFOS, the Masons and atomic bomb. The problem I see however is the images are just floating on what appears to be a black background. I would make the swirl to take up the entire cover with each image swirling like it might be caught in a drain. That way the viewer knows the images are tied together with the swirl. The girl needs to be in front of all the images. I would make the Layers logo larger and the company logo smaller (think DC comics logo.) You might also put your name above the logo like: Gregory Boycott's Layers. Your name would need to be a little smaller than it is now. Regarding the story title I would put it at the bottom floating on the cover art. The "volume number" I would change to something like "Debut Issue Zero!" Also use a sans serif font instead. I think the girl looks just fine other than the wrist which I don't think is a major big deal. Hope that helps! ~DerekG

Very nice Darth. Okay, from the top.... The comic logo is too big, it needs to be shrunk to about half of the size it is now. And the title needs to be bigger - as DerekG says, think DC comics. The figure of the girl is fine apart from the wrist - but that's just a quick tweak. The background (swirly-thing) is fine, and (IMHO) the torn images work just great. Paul

Very very nice! I cannot wait to read the story. Now Now!!! IMHO All these comix (we gotta come up with a better descriptor) are likely to be the main way any of us are going to see any returns on our investments (emotional, financial, etc) Maybe we need a comics (#@!$ innacurate descriptor) forum??? Ok, my (toughluv) crit -->I missed the whole coming out of the vortex thing. I like the idea of incorporating the bg images into it -->I would bend the chest forward a bit more to accentuate the feeling of forward motion. Giving the impression of motion is really tough in P4 without resorting to blurs or motion lines. Anyone else notice that? --> Doing that you would have to tilt the head back to keep that head jaunt that I absolutely love. -->I might take the L&R shoulders and reverse them. When you step forward with your left (as she is) your right arm and shoulder move forward. Even if she is being projected out and her arms are supposed to be behind her, I'd bend her so that the upper right of her body is the leading edge.

Okay .. Here are a few things. The wrist, the clippings and the logo and company logo already were mentioned. I wouldnt clip into the nuclear bomb because that eliminated the mushroom cload readiblity ... You have a vortex but she is not emerging from it but is more adrift in space above it. I would either angle her so she was coming from the vortex or angle vortx to match her or make her more adrift/less calm I am not sure what program you are using for the compositing but you might consider blurring or streaking the images into the path of the swirl ... You might also try to unify them by making them more monotone (Tint them to match the purplish colors) which would make it so that there is less bouncing of the eyes around the piece .. Good luck and hope these help some