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Subject: Summer Haiku?


hanevi ( ) posted Wed, 14 June 2006 at 6:29 AM · edited Wed, 14 June 2006 at 6:33 AM

Thank you Pat! It's good to hear that our wordsmithies are of benefit. :)

Best regards to you!

Hanevi.

conditioning air
is absolutely useless
with failed power lines

Here's to you TwoP!  :)

I just got news that a road-roller went over our power cables and now we're without electricity in 44 degree heat. So what are power cables doing where road-rollers can run over them? Search me! Today someone fell into an open drain outside and drowned. It's a madhouse here.


hanevi ( ) posted Wed, 14 June 2006 at 6:30 AM · edited Wed, 14 June 2006 at 6:35 AM

Hey! Drekinn beat me to it, so I'll modify mine instead, so it has a common last word.  :)


TwoPynts ( ) posted Thu, 15 June 2006 at 11:14 AM · edited Thu, 15 June 2006 at 11:16 AM

Thank you too Pat. Sorry to hear things are in such a state by you hanevi, hope they are better today. Looks like you and Drekinn were both up to the 'conditioning' challenge! =] ___________ Line cuts horizon, Opens slowly, sleepy eye, Dawn graces the land.

Kort Kramer - Kramer Kreations


Drekinn ( ) posted Sat, 17 June 2006 at 6:52 AM

Land bled dry of life,
Hard-baked crust, thirsty for rain;
Scans the skies in vain.

--

Kort: What wondrous imagery: the rising sun as an awakening eye upon a new day - you never cease to inspire me.

Drekinn
___
"Let words be your palette."
 


TallPockets ( ) posted Sat, 17 June 2006 at 6:10 PM

Vain, most all of us
In search of perfect suntan
Cancer now beckons

WINK


Drekinn ( ) posted Mon, 19 June 2006 at 5:56 AM

Beckons from afar:
The ice-cream truck melody,
Not yet on radar.

Drekinn
___
"Let words be your palette."
 


Margana ( ) posted Mon, 19 June 2006 at 12:52 PM · edited Mon, 19 June 2006 at 12:54 PM

Hi guys.And here I thought this thread was dead...I guess I'll just have to keep checking it since I simply don't get ebots for it anymore. :(

Sorry about the state of affairs there,Hanevi.Sounds awful!

And Pat,I'm glad you enjoy this.I do,too.Hope you will join in sometime.

And Tallpockets!Nice to see you here!

Lovely imagery everyone!


Radar scanned heavens
Will there be any relief
From this endless heat?


We are having such awful weather!In the 90's and oppressively humid.Yuck!TG my AC is fixed!!!

PS Sorry I couldn't do better with 'radar'. :(

Drekinn: Off to your thread now.Sorry...out of sight out of mind....

Marlene <")

Marlene S. Piskin Photography
My Blog


"A new study shows that licking the sweat off a frog can cure depression. The down side is, the minute you stop licking, the frog gets depressed again." - Jay Leno


hanevi ( ) posted Tue, 20 June 2006 at 4:23 AM

Hey, nice work with radar! Our internet lines were down till yesterday evening, so no posting for me all these days. Nice to be back.

heat shimmer
hallucination;
my eyes bleed

There! Finally, a line with just one word. I've been trying to get a one word line for ages, but it's been like a mirage. Imagine a Haiku with just three words, one for each line! Who of us is going to get it???? :D

Sorry, 'bleed' s not too easy.


Margana ( ) posted Tue, 20 June 2006 at 11:46 AM

Welcome back,Hanevi.Thanks.

Sorry,I just can't think of anything for 'bleed'.I guess I'm poetically,'bled dry'...LOL.I'll keep trying to think of something,but maybe someone else will come up with something in the interim...And having a three word Haiku is a cool idea and challenge.I'll have to try that the next time we are given a three-syllable last word here.Glad you mentioned it.

Marlene <")

Marlene S. Piskin Photography
My Blog


"A new study shows that licking the sweat off a frog can cure depression. The down side is, the minute you stop licking, the frog gets depressed again." - Jay Leno


Drekinn ( ) posted Wed, 21 June 2006 at 10:37 PM · edited Wed, 21 June 2006 at 10:39 PM

Bleed from open pores,
Thin trails of clear secretions;
Your life fluid drained.

--

Thought I'd take up the gauntlet. And no, it's not the result of runny nostrils. 😉
Good to see you back, Marlene.

Drekinn
___
"Let words be your palette."
 


hanevi ( ) posted Thu, 22 June 2006 at 5:00 AM

drained of life,
encounter with sun:
lassitude

Great work, Drekinn! I thought 'bleed'  would cause a roadblock, but it didn't.

OK! With 'lassitude', the American form Haiku gauntlet of a three word Haiku is thrown. Sorry! This sentence sounds terrible, but I'm sure you know what I mean! :D


Margana ( ) posted Fri, 23 June 2006 at 2:47 AM

Lassitude
Ennui-ridden
Surrender.

I know.It stinks...But I tried. :^/

It's very difficult!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Marlene <")

Marlene S. Piskin Photography
My Blog


"A new study shows that licking the sweat off a frog can cure depression. The down side is, the minute you stop licking, the frog gets depressed again." - Jay Leno


hanevi ( ) posted Fri, 23 June 2006 at 4:44 AM

surrender!
carcinogenic
exposure

(inspired by Tall Pockets' Haiku) :)

That's very, very good Margana! (clapping hands) It doesn't stink and it's bravely tried! And you're right- it's extremely difficult. The 5-7-5 one seems virtually impossible when constrained by a theme.

I think it might be good to keep this flexible and keep the creativity going, so if anyone can take up the gauntlets as and when thrown, it would be great, but if not, let's keep the normal Haiku going. How do you guys feel about it? Or would you like to let the thread taper off at this point? No problem on my end; I'm flexible. I think the thread has been great with all your really wonderful Haiku. :)


Drekinn ( ) posted Sun, 25 June 2006 at 9:45 PM

Exposure allowed;
To bare one's most private bits,
Sunning on the beach.

--

hanevi: It ain't over til Summer's over. 😉

Drekinn
___
"Let words be your palette."
 


hanevi ( ) posted Mon, 26 June 2006 at 3:30 AM

Way to go, Drekinn! And hats off to you and Margana for the totally fantastic alliteration thread. I've been trying (unsuccessfully so far because of the time it's taking me to think of alliterations to carry on the thread) to get involved in your thread, but... I have to squeeze in Rosity time with all my office work and travel, and it's difficult.

beach and sea:
pipe dreams to one with
land-locked life


TwoPynts ( ) posted Mon, 26 June 2006 at 9:35 AM · edited Mon, 26 June 2006 at 9:35 AM

Life boat gently tossed, Miles of ocean all around, Fell off a cruise ship. ____________________ Sorry - had to go with a 5-7-5 here. Will shoot for a 3-5-3 next time. ;] As for the alliteration thread, I'm with you there hanevi. They've just raised that bar to darn high! -------- "A word is not the same with one writer as with another. One tears it from his guts. The other pulls it out of his overcoat pocket." -Charles Peguy, poet and essayist (1873-1914)

Kort Kramer - Kramer Kreations


jstro ( ) posted Mon, 26 June 2006 at 3:26 PM

Ship of loneliness,
June Challenge goes unfulfilled.
Writer's must hate heat.

nudge nudge 😉

~jon

 
~jon
My Blog - Mad Utopia Writing in a new era.


Margana ( ) posted Mon, 26 June 2006 at 4:50 PM

Heat beats city streets
Sun-baked sidewalks, burning feet
An urban oven.

Hanevi and Kortalouche...A good thesaurus helps...Shhh,don't tell anyone... 😉

June challenge?What's that?

Marlene <")

Marlene S. Piskin Photography
My Blog


"A new study shows that licking the sweat off a frog can cure depression. The down side is, the minute you stop licking, the frog gets depressed again." - Jay Leno


jstro ( ) posted Mon, 26 June 2006 at 7:07 PM

Attached Link: June Mini-Challenge

Oven of all life, Tropical rain forest teems. Butterflies and birds. --- The June Mini-Challenge is an informal little thing started by midrael. The topic is Heat. Just follow the link. It's lonely in there.

~jon

 
~jon
My Blog - Mad Utopia Writing in a new era.


Margana ( ) posted Mon, 26 June 2006 at 10:46 PM

Birds speckle the grass
Hungry hunters enjoying
The respite of rain.

Okay.Roger that.LOL.

Marlene <")

Marlene S. Piskin Photography
My Blog


"A new study shows that licking the sweat off a frog can cure depression. The down side is, the minute you stop licking, the frog gets depressed again." - Jay Leno


TwoPynts ( ) posted Tue, 27 June 2006 at 12:10 PM

Birds chirp gleefully Calls sound out, echoing leaves Tropical heaven.

Kort Kramer - Kramer Kreations


hanevi ( ) posted Wed, 28 June 2006 at 3:10 AM

heaven burns;
eyes stinging with sweat,
search for clouds

Hi Jon! Good to see you. I get the nudge.  :)

I've been trying but failing to get anything written with having to share the computer with two other guys breathing (warm air) down my back, and then power cuts three or four times in a day, and no computer at home. Today I told myself, I'm going to get cracking, and there's been two power cuts already. But I'm going to try to beat the deadline... (gritting teeth)...(and sweating).

David's a patient guy there! :D

Margana, you know I did briefly wonder...;) But it still does take a lot of work to hold the theme together. :)


TwoPynts ( ) posted Wed, 28 June 2006 at 11:08 AM

Clouds gather, Light cracks open heaven, Thunderstorm. Whew, was able to work a 3-5-3 in there. :rolleyes:

Kort Kramer - Kramer Kreations


Margana ( ) posted Wed, 28 June 2006 at 1:42 PM

Thunderstorm
Illuminated
Percussion.

Nice one,Kortalouche. :^)

Hope you are able  to complete your entry,Hanevi.Your situation sounds rather daunting. :^/

Marlene <")

Marlene S. Piskin Photography
My Blog


"A new study shows that licking the sweat off a frog can cure depression. The down side is, the minute you stop licking, the frog gets depressed again." - Jay Leno


jstro ( ) posted Wed, 28 June 2006 at 3:33 PM

Percussion.
Woodpecker keeps beat.
Nature's jazz.


3-5-3 is definitely harder.
~jon

 
~jon
My Blog - Mad Utopia Writing in a new era.


Margana ( ) posted Wed, 28 June 2006 at 3:54 PM

Jazz and  sultry blues
Searing heat ,New Orleans beat
Essence of Dixie.

I agree.

Marlene <")

Marlene S. Piskin Photography
My Blog


"A new study shows that licking the sweat off a frog can cure depression. The down side is, the minute you stop licking, the frog gets depressed again." - Jay Leno


hanevi ( ) posted Thu, 29 June 2006 at 2:53 AM

How does a non-American write a Summer Haiku with the word 'Dixie' ? :(

I'm trying but it's hard because even if I know a little of what's associated with Dixie, it's still has an alien feel to it, and makes it difficult to write. I may have to give this one a miss.

Margana, the three word one was great!! :D


Margana ( ) posted Thu, 29 June 2006 at 12:52 PM

Thank you.

Okay,I understand completely.I usually am careful about that...sorry.I'll change it.

Jazz and  sultry blues
Searing heat ,New Orleans beat
Steam in song and street.

Not that good,but should be easier. :^)

Marlene <")

Marlene S. Piskin Photography
My Blog


"A new study shows that licking the sweat off a frog can cure depression. The down side is, the minute you stop licking, the frog gets depressed again." - Jay Leno


hanevi ( ) posted Fri, 30 June 2006 at 6:22 AM

street paved by hot slabs,
wrapped in summer's dragon breath,
my vision shimmers

Thanks, and yours is really good. :)

I'll be offline for the weekend. Keep the posting going guys. :) have a great weekend all!


Drekinn ( ) posted Sat, 01 July 2006 at 3:41 AM · edited Sat, 01 July 2006 at 3:43 AM

Shimmers so serene;
Dancing light, glowing so bright;
Sunlight on the lake.

--

hanevi and Kort: Thank you both for your positive feedback on the alliteration thread; I wasn't even sure if anyone else was reading it. Please feel free to join in with the fun there any time. 😄
And just in affirmation with Marlene, yes, my pocket dictionary and thesaurus are my two most intimate companions (no, I haven't slept with them - well, maybe just that once). 😉

Drekinn
___
"Let words be your palette."
 


hanevi ( ) posted Tue, 04 July 2006 at 3:56 AM · edited Tue, 04 July 2006 at 4:01 AM

lake of cool blue wet:
tantalizing my fevered
imagination

Thanks Drekinn. I'm still trying to see how far I can go without either dic or thes, but I suspect a whilte flag day coming soon. :D

I won't be online tomorrow. Important meeting. (No, I'm not going to be fired for being on Rosity during work hours :) ...I have a great team who keep encouraging creativity as long as the rest of the work is done).


Drekinn ( ) posted Wed, 05 July 2006 at 12:06 AM

Imagination:
Ice-cold draught of lemonade,
Allures when eyes closed.

Drekinn
___
"Let words be your palette."
 


TwoPynts ( ) posted Thu, 06 July 2006 at 11:23 AM

Closed for the Summer, Snowbirds all flock to the north, Fall sees their return. _______ Looks like I've been missing out on some good stuff. =]

Kort Kramer - Kramer Kreations


jstro ( ) posted Thu, 06 July 2006 at 2:33 PM

Return to your youth,
On the banks of the old creek.
Dive in for a swim.

~jon

 
~jon
My Blog - Mad Utopia Writing in a new era.


TwoPynts ( ) posted Thu, 06 July 2006 at 3:06 PM · edited Thu, 06 July 2006 at 3:07 PM

Swim below, Green rays filter down, Sea bottom.

Kort Kramer - Kramer Kreations


Drekinn ( ) posted Sat, 08 July 2006 at 3:20 AM

Bottom bare and oiled;
Tan lines far from your concerns:
Nude beach sunbathing.

Drekinn
___
"Let words be your palette."
 


hanevi ( ) posted Mon, 10 July 2006 at 1:18 AM

sunbathing?
perhaps sunburning
is more apt...

:D Sorry for the tough one.


TwoPynts ( ) posted Mon, 10 July 2006 at 8:31 AM

apt to choose, all look delicious, ice cream truck. ----------- Fun!

Kort Kramer - Kramer Kreations


hanevi ( ) posted Tue, 11 July 2006 at 1:50 AM

truck with Coke,
thirsty drivers curse,
irony.

Sorry again! Actually, I'm not.  :lol:

It's another single word gauntlet. So who'll come up with a three-word Haiku?


Margana ( ) posted Tue, 11 July 2006 at 1:59 AM

Irony?And a summer theme?Yeesh!!!!!!!!!!!

LOL...I Iove how you throw down the gauntlet!

Marlene <")

Marlene S. Piskin Photography
My Blog


"A new study shows that licking the sweat off a frog can cure depression. The down side is, the minute you stop licking, the frog gets depressed again." - Jay Leno


Margana ( ) posted Tue, 11 July 2006 at 2:07 AM

Irony?
Air-conditioning
Is too cold!

LOL.

Sorry,not a three word haiku...Couldn't do it.. :^)

Marlene <")

Marlene S. Piskin Photography
My Blog


"A new study shows that licking the sweat off a frog can cure depression. The down side is, the minute you stop licking, the frog gets depressed again." - Jay Leno


TwoPynts ( ) posted Wed, 12 July 2006 at 2:30 PM

Cold cannot touch us, Sand sifts softly betwixt toes, Florida sunrise.

Kort Kramer - Kramer Kreations


hanevi ( ) posted Thu, 13 July 2006 at 6:11 AM

sunrise pale
through hazy, grey sky,
monsoon comes

Sorry, Marlene! I know that was a a bit too tough for enjoyment. I like yours; there's a subtle way you have with words. :)

That's a gentle one, TwoP! Very nice!

The rains are here! Now floods and disease will follow, but at least the heat's lessened. :)


Margana ( ) posted Thu, 13 July 2006 at 9:43 AM

Thank you Hanevi.I could say the same for you. :^)  Now monsoons? Floods and disease? Yikes! Dramatic weather changes you have there!

Comes and goes so fast
The summer passes swiftly
Gone too soon...too soon.

Marlene <")

Marlene S. Piskin Photography
My Blog


"A new study shows that licking the sweat off a frog can cure depression. The down side is, the minute you stop licking, the frog gets depressed again." - Jay Leno


TwoPynts ( ) posted Thu, 13 July 2006 at 12:18 PM

Soon softens, Green darkens ruby, Raspberry. These 3-5-3s are a lot of fun. =]

Kort Kramer - Kramer Kreations


Margana ( ) posted Thu, 13 July 2006 at 1:38 PM

Raspberry
Linguistically
Hoot or fruit?

LOL.

I know,not summer-related ...but I couldn't help myself. ;^)

Marlene <")

Marlene S. Piskin Photography
My Blog


"A new study shows that licking the sweat off a frog can cure depression. The down side is, the minute you stop licking, the frog gets depressed again." - Jay Leno


TwoPynts ( ) posted Thu, 13 July 2006 at 2:01 PM

You are a hoot Marlene! ;oP Hoot, hoot calls the owl, Spying a tender rodent. Swoop, crunch -- that was lunch.

Kort Kramer - Kramer Kreations


Margana ( ) posted Thu, 13 July 2006 at 2:16 PM

LMAO So are you,Kortalouche!

Lunch...what a beach treat
Picnic basket sandwiches
Accent on the 'sand'.

Okay,now I'm just being silly.Sorrrrrry,I'll be good. ;^)

Marlene <")

Marlene S. Piskin Photography
My Blog


"A new study shows that licking the sweat off a frog can cure depression. The down side is, the minute you stop licking, the frog gets depressed again." - Jay Leno


TwoPynts ( ) posted Thu, 13 July 2006 at 2:29 PM

'Sand'men and Jawas, Laser beams and Stormtroopers, Summer blockbuster. _______ Okay enough sillyness from me too. It is fun though. :) Sorry about that last word there, but the guanlets is thrown down for a 3-5-3 3 work haiku now.

Kort Kramer - Kramer Kreations


Margana ( ) posted Thu, 13 July 2006 at 2:53 PM

Blockbuster
Costs me a bundle
"No late fees" my eye!

This is just a joke.No one need take it seriously,LOL.I feel like Jim Carrey in The Mask...

"Somebody stop me!"

Marlene <")

Marlene S. Piskin Photography
My Blog


"A new study shows that licking the sweat off a frog can cure depression. The down side is, the minute you stop licking, the frog gets depressed again." - Jay Leno


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